自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問にまず直接答え、その後に自転車の色や誰が買ってくれたか、どこで乗ったかを簡潔に説明しましょう。「my grandfather bought me」ではなく「my grandfather bought it for me」、「I always liked it to go to the park」ではなく「I liked riding it to the park」と表現します。言い直しや「um」などのフィラーを減らし、過去の話なので動詞の時制を過去形にそろえてください。

範例: Yes, I had a green bicycle when I was a child. My grandfather bought it for me, and I was very fond of it. I often rode it to the park near my house.

建議: 最初に「Yes, they are」と明確に答え、理由として病院で働いていたときに見た光景を述べると、回答の流れがより自然になります。「came to the hospital as, by bicycle」ではなく「came to the hospital by bicycle」とし、「for the commute time」は「to commute」または「for commuting」に直しましょう。「a lot of people use the bicycle」は一般的な話なので「a lot of people use bicycles」と複数形にし、フィラーや繰り返しを避けてください。

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Japan. When I worked at a hospital, I often saw people arriving by bicycle. Many people use bikes to commute, especially for short trips.

× My grandfather bought me.

✓ My grandfather bought it for me.

The verb bought needs an object describing what was purchased. Add it to refer to the bicycle. You can also say, My grandfather bought me a bicycle.

× And then I really like it.

✓ And then I really liked it.

The speaker is describing a childhood experience in the past, so use the past-tense form liked instead of like.

× I always liked it to go to the park.

✓ I always liked riding it to the park.

When like means enjoying an activity, follow it with a gerund. Use riding rather than to go, and specify the activity the bicycle was used for.

× A lot of people came to the hospital as by bicycle.

✓ A lot of people came to the hospital by bicycle.

By bicycle is the correct expression for describing a means of transportation. Do not add as before it.

× A lot of people use the bicycle for the commute time.

✓ A lot of people use bicycles for commuting.

After the preposition for, use a gerund such as commuting. This phrasing also expresses the general activity more naturally than for the commute time.