自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then describe the bike using a clear, natural phrase such as “glittery” or “decorated with glitter.” Replace “learn showing” with “enjoy showing,” and use linking words to connect the gift and your memories. Check that the answer is no more than five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a glittery pink bike for my eighth birthday. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, and I loved showing it to my friends.

建議: Avoid repeating the same point in the first two sentences. Give a more specific reason or example to support your opinion, and consider whether popularity varies by place or purpose. Use a linking word such as “because” or “for example” to make your answer more developed.

範例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people prefer cars because they’re more convenient for commuting and travelling long distances. However, bikes are still common for exercise and short trips.

× Yes I did, it was incongruent in glitter and my parents gave it to me for my 8th birthday.

✓ Yes, I did. It was incongruent in glitter, and my parents gave it to me for my 8th birthday.

The original uses a comma to join two independent clauses, creating a comma splice. Separate the clauses with a period or join them with a suitable conjunction. A comma after Yes is also needed to punctuate the introductory response.

× I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood and learn showing it to my friends.

✓ I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood and learn to show it to my friends.

The verb learn is followed by a to-infinitive, not an -ing form, in this construction. Use learn to show rather than learn showing.