自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then describe the bike or explain what made it memorable. Use past-tense forms because you are talking about childhood: say “I had,” “my father gave me,” and “I turned 12.” Use “on my birthday” and “the first person in my family to own a bike.” Break up the long sentence and avoid “small kind of bike,” which sounds unnatural.

範例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my 12th birthday, and I was the first person in my family to own one. I was really excited and rode it around our neighborhood.

建議: Give a clear answer and support it with a specific reason or example. Use “they use them” to agree with the plural “bikes,” and replace “on course” with “of course” or, more naturally here, remove it. Clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes, since the claim that they cause heavy traffic is more likely to refer to motorbikes. Avoid saying “so much traffic” unless you explain the connection.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially motorbikes. Many people use them to commute because they are convenient and relatively inexpensive. However, in busy cities, the large number of motorbikes can contribute to traffic congestion.

× I have a small kind of bike that is gifted by my father ... when I was turning into 12 years ... that has bike.

✓ I had a small kind of bike that was given to me by my father ... when I turned 12 ... that had a bike.

The student is describing a childhood experience, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Use 'had' rather than 'have,' 'was given' rather than 'is gifted,' 'turned 12' rather than 'was turning into 12 years,' and 'had' rather than 'has.' A natural way to express the age is 'when I turned 12.'

× in my birthday

✓ on my birthday

Use 'on' with a specific day or date, including someone's birthday. For example, say 'I got it on my birthday.'

× that has bike

✓ that had a bike

The singular countable noun 'bike' needs an article. Use 'a bike' when referring to one bike for the first time.

× people have their own bikes and they use it

✓ people have their own bikes and they use them

The pronoun must agree in number with the noun it refers to. Since 'bikes' is plural, use 'them' rather than 'it.'

× on course nowadays

✓ of course nowadays

'Of course' is the correct fixed expression meaning 'certainly.' 'On course' has a different meaning and does not fit this sentence.