自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答切题，也提到了自行车的颜色、大小和来源。注意回忆童年时要统一使用过去时，例如将“when I am child”改为“when I was a child”，将“the bike is”改为“the bike was”。颜色前不加冠词，应该说“it was pink”；“a birthday gift”比“the birthday gift”自然。结尾的“I can remember that”与前文重复，可以删去。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had a small pink bike that I thought was really cute. It was a birthday gift from my father, so it was very special to me.

建議: 你表达了自行车受欢迎的原因，但“some of the country”不符合这里的意思，可以改为“in some areas”；“the road is very thin”应使用更自然的“the roads are narrow”。注意主谓一致和表达方式，例如“everyone drives”和“the roads would be congested”。避免连续使用“So”和重复“some people, so many people”，并补充一个具体说明，让逻辑更清楚。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded towns and cities. In some areas, the roads are narrow, so driving a car can be inconvenient. Cycling is often a more practical way to get around, particularly for short trips.

× Yeah, I had a bike when I am child and I can remember the bike's color is a pink and the bike is very cute and small. It's the birthday gift from my father, so yeah, I can remember that.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child. I can remember that the bike was pink and very cute and small. It was a birthday gift from my father, so yeah, I can remember that.

这段话讲的是童年时的自行车，因此描述当时的状态应使用过去时。将“am”改为“was”，并将“the bike is”和“It's”改为“the bike was”和“It was”。

× Yeah, I had a bike when I am child and I can remember the bike's color is a pink and the bike is very cute and small. It's the birthday gift from my father, so yeah, I can remember that.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child. I can remember that the bike was pink and very cute and small. It was a birthday gift from my father, so yeah, I can remember that.

可数名词单数“child”前需要冠词，所以应说“a child”。“pink”在这里是颜色形容词，前面不需要冠词“a”；“birthday gift”是单数可数名词，前面应加“a”，说“a birthday gift”。

× Yeah, in my country bikes are very popular because some of the country the road is very thin and the car is very large.

✓ Yeah, bikes are very popular in my country because, in some parts of the country, the roads are very narrow and cars are very large.

“some of the country”后面直接接“The road is...”使原因从句的结构不完整。表示“在这个国家的某些地方”时，可以说“in some parts of the country”。

× So if everyone drive cars, the road is very squeezy.

✓ So if everyone drives cars, the roads become very crowded.

“everyone”虽然指很多人，但语法上按第三人称单数处理，因此一般现在时的动词要加“-s”：应说“everyone drives”。

× So if everyone drive cars, the road is very squeezy.

✓ So if everyone drives cars, the roads become very crowded.

“squeezy”通常不用于描述交通拥挤或道路上车辆很多。这里用“crowded”表示“拥挤的”更合适；描述道路空间狭窄时，也可以说“narrow”。