自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then add one or two clear details. Use the past tense consistently, and avoid fillers and unfinished phrases. Correct the phrases “one of the bike” to “a bike,” “write load it” to “ride it,” and “absorbed to the process” to a natural expression such as “really enjoyed riding it.”

範例: Yes, I had a blue bike when I was little. My grandpa gave it to me for my birthday, and I rode it almost every day. I really enjoyed exploring the neighborhood on it.

建議: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear reason and example. Use “cars are expensive,” “ride them,” and “commute to work” rather than the incorrect phrases in your answer. Avoid repeating the same point, and use a linking word such as “because” or “also” to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. Cars can be expensive, so many people ride bicycles to commute to work or run errands. They are also a convenient way to get around short distances.

× My grandpa bought me one of the bike.

✓ My grandpa bought me one of the bikes.

After one of the, use a plural noun because one item is being selected from a group. Use bikes, not bike.

× When I was a toddler, my grandpa bought me one of the bike.

✓ When I was a toddler, my grandpa bought me one of the bikes.

The article a is needed before the singular count noun toddler. The corrected sentence also uses the plural bikes after one of the.

× My grandpa bought me one of the bike in which, blue color, is a birthday gift for my birthday.

✓ My grandpa bought me a blue bike as a birthday gift.

The original sentence combines incomplete and incompatible clauses, making the relationship between the bike, its color, and the gift unclear. Use a direct sentence structure: subject + verb + object, followed by as a birthday gift.

× Then I used to ride it a lot every day and I feel absorbed in the process.

✓ Then I used to ride it a lot every day, and I felt absorbed in the process.

The sentence describes a past childhood experience, so felt should be in the past tense to match that context.

× I feel absorbed to the in the process.

✓ I felt absorbed in the process.

The correct preposition after absorbed is in, not to. Use absorbed in something.

× Then I used to ride it a lot every day and I feel absorbed in the process when I'm.

✓ Then I used to ride it a lot every day, and I felt absorbed in the process.

The ending when I'm is incomplete because it has no complement and leaves the sentence unfinished. Remove it or complete the thought with a clear clause.

× I think they are very popular in my country because there's a cars very expensive.

✓ I think they are very popular in my country because cars are very expensive.

There is or there's should not be used in this construction. State the subject directly: cars are very expensive. This also avoids the incorrect combination there's a cars.

× There's a cars very expensive.

✓ Cars are very expensive.

Cars is plural, so it cannot be used with the singular article a. In the corrected sentence, the plural subject cars takes the plural verb are.

× There's a cars very expensive.

✓ Cars are very expensive.

The plural subject cars requires the plural verb are. The original also incorrectly pairs cars with there's, which is singular.

× Adults ride the everywhere.

✓ Adults ride them everywhere.

The is an article and cannot stand in for the plural noun bikes. Use the object pronoun them to refer back to bikes.

× Adults ride them everywhere to commute to their workers and for strolling on the city.

✓ Adults ride them everywhere to commute to work and stroll in the city.

Use in, rather than on, for being within a city. The phrase commute to work uses the conventional preposition to; work does not need a possessive determiner here.