自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two clear details. Correct the grammar to “when I was seven years old” and “I will always remember it.” Avoid repeating or restarting words such as “a bike bike” and “bike cycle”; simply say “a bicycle.”

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My dad bought it for me when I was seven, and I’ll always remember how excited I was. It was black, and I rode it around my neighborhood.

建議: Give a direct answer and clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorcycles, since “bikes” can refer to either. Remove repeated words and fillers, and add a specific detail about who uses them or why. Use a linking phrase such as “For example” to develop your point.

範例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country, especially among adults. For example, many people use them to commute because they are convenient in busy traffic. Bicycles are also used, but I see motorcycles more often.

× I remember when I was 7 year old kid

✓ I remember when I was a 7-year-old kid

The singular countable noun phrase kid needs the article a. Also, when a number and a unit of time form a compound adjective before a noun, year is singular and the words are hyphenated: a 7-year-old kid.

× I will be remember that.

✓ I will remember that.

Use the base form of the verb after will. Be is unnecessary here; it would only be used in a passive construction, such as I will be remembered.

× Yeah, bikes are popular in my country, especially amongst the the adults.

✓ Yeah, bikes are popular in my country, especially among adults.

The is repeated, and a definite article is not needed when adults refers to adults in general. Use adults without the article.