自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: You answer directly and include a personal detail, which makes the response engaging. Improve naturalness by avoiding hesitation and repetition, and use the correct preposition and phrasing for the date and colour: say “on 14 September” and “It was black.” You could also replace “gifted me that bike” with the more conversational “gave me the bike as a present.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday present on 14 September 2008, and I was thrilled because having a bike felt special at the time. It was black, and I rode it around my neighbourhood.

建議: You give a clear opinion and distinguish bicycles from motorbikes, but some phrases are repetitive or unnatural, such as “for work purpose” and “for other traveling purposes.” Use “for work” or “for short trips,” and explain briefly why bicycles are popular. Avoid fillers such as “um” and “uh” where possible.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. I’ve seen people of all ages riding them, and many adults use them to commute to work or run errands. For longer journeys, people usually prefer motorbikes or cars.

× I remember it was my birthday in 14th September in 2008 when my father surprised me with this bike.

✓ I remember it was my birthday on 14th September in 2008 when my father surprised me with this bike.

Use on with a specific date. Use in with a year, so on 14th September in 2008 is correct.

× It was black color.

✓ It was black in color.

To describe the color using the phrase in color, include the preposition in. You can also simply say, It was black.

× Um, I think from childhood I have seen people riding bikes.

✓ Um, I think since childhood I have seen people riding bikes.

Since is used for a period that began in the past and continues to the present, which fits the present perfect have seen. From usually needs an ending point, such as from childhood to adulthood.

× Even adults use uh bikes to travel from one place to other for work purpose or for other traveling purposes too, for short distances.

✓ Even adults use bikes to travel from one place to another for work purpose or for other traveling purposes too, for short distances.

In the paired expression from one place to another, use another to refer to a different, unspecified place. Other does not work by itself in this construction.

× Even adults use uh bikes to travel from one place to other for work purpose or for other traveling purposes too, for short distances.

✓ Even adults use bikes to travel from one place to other for work purposes or for other traveling purposes too, for short distances.

Purpose is a countable noun. In this general statement, use the plural form purposes rather than the singular form purpose.