自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repeating “rode around” and simplify the description of the lake. Use the past tense consistently and say “my friends” if you mean more than one person. The answer is within the five-sentence limit, but a more concise ending would sound more natural.

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, and I rode it a lot. My friends and I often cycled around our neighborhood and the lake near our house. It was one of my favorite childhood possessions because we had so much fun together.

建議: Give a clear answer first, such as “Not particularly.” Avoid the repeated and incorrect phrase “the this country,” and say “the Netherlands” and “the necessary infrastructure.” Replace “not business” with “not for commuting.” Add a specific detail or example, and reduce hesitation and repetition to make your response more fluent.

範例: Bikes aren’t particularly popular in my country, especially as a way to commute. Unlike the Netherlands, we don’t have enough dedicated bike lanes, so many people cycle mainly for exercise or recreation. For example, you’re more likely to see people riding in parks than cycling to work.

× I think not because I always compare to Netherlands and if you compare the this country to my country, our country doesn't, uh, have the necessity necessary infrastructure for biking and a lot of people bike just leisurely, not business.

✓ I think not because I always compare my country to the Netherlands, and if you compare this country to my country, our country doesn't, uh, have the necessary infrastructure for biking, and a lot of people bike just leisurely, not for business.

The country name Netherlands is conventionally used with the definite article: the Netherlands. Do not use the before this, because this already determines the noun. The phrase the this country should be this country.

× I think not because I always compare to Netherlands and if you compare the this country to my country, our country doesn't, uh, have the necessity necessary infrastructure for biking and a lot of people bike just leisurely, not business.

✓ I think not because I always compare my country to the Netherlands, and if you compare this country to my country, our country doesn't, uh, have the necessary infrastructure for biking, and a lot of people bike just leisurely, not for business.

Necessary is the adjective that describes infrastructure. Necessity is a noun, so it does not fit before infrastructure in this phrase. Use the necessary infrastructure.

× I think not because I always compare to Netherlands and if you compare the this country to my country, our country doesn't, uh, have the necessity necessary infrastructure for biking and a lot of people bike just leisurely, not business.

✓ I think not because I always compare my country to the Netherlands, and if you compare this country to my country, our country doesn't, uh, have the necessary infrastructure for biking, and a lot of people bike just leisurely, not for business.

The phrase not business needs the preposition for to express the purpose of biking. Say not for business. You can also say for leisure rather than leisurely to make the two purposes parallel.