自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: You answer the question directly and include a relevant childhood memory, but the response ends mid-sentence. Correct the verb patterns: say “started learning” or “started to learn,” “when I was five,” and “to make sure.” Keep the past-tense narration consistent, and finish with what happened after it became easier.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started learning to ride when I was five, and my father held the bike to help me keep my balance. It was difficult at first, but I soon learned to ride on my own.

建議: Your answer is relevant and gives examples of different people who cycle. Improve accuracy and naturalness by using the plural “bikes,” replacing “We can see on the road there are” with “You can see,” and saying “go to school” and “go to work.” Avoid repeating “even,” and use a linking phrase to organize your examples.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. You can often see students of all ages, from elementary school to university, riding them to school. Some adults also cycle to work, especially if they live nearby.

× I started to learning at five years old with my father who is holding the bicycle for me to making sure I'm stable to go by myself.

✓ I started learning at five years old with my father, who held the bicycle for me to make sure I was stable enough to ride by myself.

After start, use either the -ing form or an infinitive: started learning or started to learn. After to in the purpose phrase, use the base verb make, not making. Use started learning and to make sure in this sentence.

× I started to learning at five years old with my father who is holding the bicycle for me to making sure I'm stable to go by myself.

✓ I started learning at five years old with my father, who held the bicycle for me to make sure I was stable enough to ride by myself.

The student is describing a childhood experience, so the verbs in this past-time account should be in the past tense. Replace is holding with held and I'm with I was. Keep the tense consistent throughout the story.

× It was hard at first, but when I.

✓ It was hard at first, but I eventually learned to ride.

The clause beginning with but when is incomplete: when introduces a dependent clause, and the sentence does not finish that clause or provide a main clause after it. Complete the thought with a full clause, such as I eventually learned to ride.

× Yes, in my country, bike is very common.

✓ Yes, in my country, bikes are very common.

Bike is a countable noun, and this sentence refers to bicycles in general. Use the plural form bikes when speaking generally. Make the verb plural as well: bikes are.

× We can see on the road there are students from elementary students to high school, even the university students use the bike to go to the school.

✓ On the roads, we can see students from elementary school through high school, and even university students use bikes to get to school.

The phrase from elementary students to high school is not parallel: it compares students with a school level. Use matching categories, such as from elementary school through high school. Also connect the two main ideas with and to avoid an unclear run-on sentence.

× We can see on the road there are students from elementary students to high school, even the university students use the bike to go to the school.

✓ On the roads, we can see students from elementary school through high school, and even university students use bikes to get to school.

When referring generally to university students and the usual activity of attending school, do not use the before university students or school. Use university students and go to school. Avoid the when talking about these institutions in a general sense.

× We can see on the road there are students from elementary students to high school, even the university students use the bike to go to the school.

✓ On the roads, we can see students from elementary school through high school, and even university students use bikes to get to school.

The sentence refers to bicycles in general, so use the plural bikes rather than the bike. Use a plural noun when describing a general category of countable objects.

× Even some career women or men would use the bike to go to job.

✓ Even some career women or men would use bikes to go to work.

Job is a singular countable noun and normally needs an article, but the natural expression for traveling to one's workplace is go to work, without an article. Use go to work for this general meaning.