自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: You answer directly and give a relevant personal detail. Improve the flow by dividing the long sentence and avoiding the slightly unnatural phrase “taught me how to ride it very well.” You could say that your father helped you learn to ride it. Add a linking phrase such as “At first” to make the sequence of events clearer.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven. At first, I kept falling off, but my father patiently taught me how to ride it.

建議: You give a clear overall opinion and make a useful contrast between your neighbourhood and the city. However, repeated phrases and a likely speech error interrupt the answer. Use “bicycles” or “bikes” consistently, say “many people ride bikes,” and connect the contrast with “although” or “while.” Add one specific reason or observation if you can.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in the larger cities. Although people in my neighbourhood don’t ride them very often, I often see many cyclists in the city centre. It’s fascinating to see them using bikes for commuting and exercise.

× I believe bikes are popular in my country however my neighbourhood in our neighbourhood shit in our neighbourhood we do not ride that much bikes but overall in the main city it's very popular and it is very fascinating to see people riding bikes.

✓ I believe bikes are popular in my country. However, in my neighbourhood, we do not ride that many bikes, but overall, biking is very popular in the main city, and it is fascinating to see people riding bikes.

Use many with the countable plural noun bikes. Much is used with uncountable nouns, so that much bikes is incorrect. Use that many bikes instead.

× I believe bikes are popular in my country however my neighbourhood in our neighbourhood shit in our neighbourhood we do not ride that much bikes but overall in the main city it's very popular and it is very fascinating to see people riding bikes.

✓ I believe bikes are popular in my country. However, in my neighbourhood, we do not ride that many bikes, but overall, biking is very popular in the main city, and it is fascinating to see people riding bikes.

The original contains repeated, incomplete wording that interrupts the sentence, and however is not correctly separated from the clauses. Remove the false start and use a period before However. Organize the remaining ideas into a clear sentence.