自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問には直接答えられており、子どもの頃の使い方と現在の状況も説明できています。一方、“ride a bike to go to a park”は少し不自然なので、“ride my bike to the park”のように簡潔に表現しましょう。また、“I'm not riding in anymore”は意味が伝わりにくいため、“I don't ride it anymore”が自然です。過去と現在の対比を保ち、文を簡潔にまとめるとさらに効果的です。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to the park or to meet up with my friends. I don't ride it anymore, though, because I'm out of practice.

建議: 自分の地域に触れた点は具体的で、人気の理由も挙げられています。ただし、“bikes”に対して“it”を使っているため、“them”または“bicycles”に合わせてください。また、習慣を表す場合は“People ride”が自然です。“really popular”の繰り返しや、文末の“come on”は不要なので削り、理由を一度だけ明確に述べましょう。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in my prefecture. Many people ride them because they’re convenient and inexpensive. They’re particularly useful for short trips around town.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride a bike to go to a park or to hang out with my friends but I'm not riding in anymore because I'm out of practice.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride a bike to go to a park or to hang out with my friends, but I'm not riding anymore because I'm out of practice.

The preposition in is not used after ride in this context. You can say ride a bike or, when the bike is already understood, simply ride. Avoid adding in unless you mean riding inside something, as in ride in a car.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially in my prefecture. People are riding it a lot because it's really convenient and inexpensive so it's really popular and come on.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially in my prefecture. People are riding them a lot because they're really convenient and inexpensive, so they're really popular.

Bikes is plural, so the pronouns referring to bikes should also be plural: them and they are (they're), not it and it's. Use them as the object of riding and they're as the subject of the following descriptions. The final words come on do not fit grammatically with the sentence, so they have been omitted.