自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問には答えられていますが、「when I was a kid / when I was a child」や「bike / bicycle」の繰り返しがあり、少し冗長です。また、子どもの頃の話なので「commute」は過去形の「commuted」にしましょう。通学に自転車を使っていた頻度や、そのときの気持ちを具体的に一つ加えると、より自然で内容が伝わりやすくなります。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it. I often rode it to school, which was a fun way to start the day.

建議: 自転車が人気である理由を挙げようとしている点はよいですが、「bikes」の言い直しや「everybody」の繰り返しが多く、最後の文も未完です。「Bikes are affordable」「They don’t require gasoline」のように、主語と動詞を含む文で簡潔に説明しましょう。また、「For example」などで具体的な利用場面を加えると、回答にまとまりが出ます。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they’re affordable and don’t require gasoline. They’re also convenient for short trips, especially in busy areas where parking is limited.

× And I really loved riding a bike and sometimes I commute to school by bicycle and a bike. I really enjoyed it.

✓ And I really loved riding a bike, and sometimes I commuted to school by bicycle. I really enjoyed it.

The student is describing childhood, so the habitual action of commuting should also be in the past tense: commuted, not commute. Use the past tense consistently when describing past routines.

× Everybody can afford it.

✓ Everybody can afford one.

The pronoun it refers to the plural bikes, so it does not agree with the noun it replaces. Use one to refer to a single bike in a general statement, or them to refer to bikes.

× And no need gasoline.

✓ And they don't need gasoline.

This phrase has no verb, so it is a sentence fragment. Add a subject and a verb to make a complete sentence. Here, they refers to bikes.

× And very convenient to go anywhere.

✓ And they are very convenient for getting around.

This phrase is missing a subject and a main verb. Add they are to form a complete sentence. Use for getting around to express the purpose naturally.