自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then add one or two clear supporting details. Use natural word order and phrasing: say “a small pink bike” rather than “a pink color small bike,” and “my father gave it to me” rather than “it was gifted by my father.” Avoid repeating “and” or adding the unnatural phrase “enthusiasm I was really having.”

範例: Yes, I had a small pink bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my sixth birthday, and I was thrilled. I remember showing it to my friends as soon as I got it.

建議: Give a clear answer first and support it with a specific reason or example. Avoid the incorrect construction “which is nowadays people” and vague phrases such as “this thing.” Use “bicycles” or “bikes” consistently, and replace fillers like “uh” with a brief pause. Also clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes, since “vehicles” could refer to either.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They’re affordable and convenient for short trips, and they can help people avoid traffic. Many people also use them to commute to work or school.

× I had a pink color small bike.

✓ I had a small pink bike.

In English, size usually comes before color when multiple adjectives describe a noun. Say small pink bike, not pink color small bike. The word color is unnecessary here.

× I showed it to my friends with lot of enjoyment and enthusiasm.

✓ I showed it to my friends with a lot of enjoyment and enthusiasm.

The expression is a lot of, so the article a is needed before lot. Remember to use a lot of with countable and uncountable nouns.

× I even showed it to my friends with lot of enjoyment and enthusiasm I was really having.

✓ I showed it to my friends with a lot of enjoyment and enthusiasm, and I was really enthusiastic.

The original ending, enthusiasm I was really having, is awkwardly attached to the preceding clause and makes the sentence structure unclear. Use a separate clause, such as I was really enthusiastic, to express the idea clearly.

× Bikes are something very important in our country, which is nowadays people are more eager to use bikes than any other vehicles because it is more convenient and also cost efficient.

✓ Bikes are very important in our country. Nowadays, people are more eager to use bikes than other types of vehicles because bikes are more convenient and cost-efficient.

The phrase which is incorrectly joins two complete ideas, making the sentence structure confusing. End the first idea and begin a new sentence with Nowadays. This also makes the relationship between the ideas clearer.

× People are more eager to use bikes because it is more convenient.

✓ People are more eager to use bikes because they are more convenient.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to the plural noun bikes. Use the plural pronoun they to agree with bikes.

× People will be mostly using this thing for their day-to-day life.

✓ People mostly use bikes in their day-to-day lives.

The sentence describes a general habit, so the present simple is more appropriate than will be using, which usually refers to a future action. Use people mostly use bikes to describe what people generally do.