自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋고, 어린 시절 자전거를 배운 과정을 덧붙여 내용도 구체적입니다. 다만 “most of children”은 “most children” 또는 “most of the children”로, “bikes which has”는 복수형에 맞춰 “bikes that had”로 고쳐야 합니다. 보조 바퀴가 달린 자전거를 뜻한다면 “a bike with training wheels”라고 표현하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 부모에게 배운다는 일반적인 설명은 줄이고 본인의 경험을 중심으로 답하면 더 효과적입니다.

範例: Yes, I did. I started out on a bike with training wheels, and my parents helped me learn to ride it. Once I felt more confident, I switched to a regular two-wheeled bike.

建議: 자전거가 한국에서 인기 있다는 점을 분명히 답하고 공공 자전거 거치대를 근거로 든 점이 좋습니다. “we learn ... when we were a kid”는 시제가 일치하지 않으므로 “many people learn ... when they are children”처럼 고치고, “common transportation”은 “a common form of transport” 또는 “a popular way to get around”으로 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. “so”가 반복되므로 연결어를 다양하게 사용하고, 공공 자전거가 어디에서 이용되는지 구체적인 예를 하나 덧붙여 보세요.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Korea. Many people learn to ride when they’re children, and cycling is also a convenient way to get around. For example, public bike stations are easy to find in many cities, especially near parks and subway stations.

× I'm pretty sure that most of children in this country have their own bikes because we usually learn how to ride a bike from our own parents.

✓ I'm pretty sure that most children in this country have their own bikes because we usually learn how to ride a bike from our own parents.

When most is followed directly by a plural noun to make a general statement, do not use of. Alternatively, you can say most of the children when referring to a specific group. Use most children here because the sentence refers generally to children in the country.

× So I started with the bikes which has four wheels and I moved to bikes which has only two wheels.

✓ So I started with bikes that had four wheels and moved to bikes that had only two wheels.

The relative pronoun that refers to the plural noun bikes, so the verb must also be plural: have, not has. Since the sentence describes events in the past, had is appropriate. Use a plural subject with a plural verb.

× As I mentioned, we learn how to ride bikes when we were a kid.

✓ As I mentioned, we learned how to ride bikes when we were kids.

The sentence refers to childhood in the past, so learn should be in the past tense: learned. Keep the verbs in the same time frame when describing a past experience.

× As I mentioned, we learn how to ride bikes when we were a kid.

✓ As I mentioned, we learned how to ride bikes when we were kids.

We refers to more than one person, so the noun describing the group should be plural: kids, not a kid. Match singular or plural nouns to the person or group they describe.

× So it's really common transportation in Korea so we can easily find even the public bicycle stations as well.

✓ So it's a really common form of transportation in Korea, so we can even find public bicycle stations.

Form of transportation is a singular countable noun phrase, so it needs the article a. Public bicycle stations is used generally here, so the definite article the is unnecessary. Use a before a singular countable noun and omit the when referring to things in general.