自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答后补充具体信息。注意使用正确的时间表达，例如“when I started high school”；避免重复和自我改口。最后一句可说明骑车如何让上学更方便，使用“made my commute more convenient”而不是“made traveling more confidence”。

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My father bought me one when I started high school, and I used it to ride to school. It made my commute much more convenient.

建議: 回答方向明确，但不要用“Because”单独起句；可直接说明自行车为什么受欢迎。把“bikers”换成更贴切的“people who ride bikes”，并具体说明自行车的用途。注意“bikes”应使用复数，避免口语填充语“you know”。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them to commute or get some exercise, especially in the mornings and at weekends. They’re also an affordable and convenient way to get around.

× When I got senior high school, my father bought one for me.

✓ When I got to senior high school, my father bought one for me.

表示“到达某个地点或阶段”时，get 后面通常需要加介词 to。应说 “got to senior high school”。

× When I went to go when I went to school which made traveling more confidence.

✓ When I went to school, the bike made traveling more convenient.

原句重复使用 “when I went”，且后面的 which 从句指代不清，导致句子结构混乱。建议删除重复部分，并明确说明是自行车让出行更方便。

× When I went to go when I went to school which made traveling more confidence.

✓ When I went to school, the bike made traveling more convenient.

“confidence”是名词，不能直接放在 “more” 后面修饰 traveling。这里需要形容词；根据语境，用 “convenient”（方便的）更自然。

× Because in my country there are so many bikers, you know, the people who buy bike go around every day to exercise.

✓ There are so many bikers in my country. They ride bikes every day to exercise.

原句以 “Because” 引导原因从句，却没有与之对应的主句，结构不完整；后半句也较难理解。可以拆成两个完整句子，并清楚说明这些人每天骑车锻炼。

× Because in my country there are so many bikers, you know, the people who buy bike go around every day to exercise.

✓ There are so many bikers in my country. They ride bikes every day to exercise.

泛指人们日常使用的自行车时，bike 应使用复数 bikes。注意：这里改成 “ride bikes” 也更符合“骑自行车”的表达习惯。