自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and clearly: say whether you had a bike. Use the past tense to describe your childhood, and say “learned to ride it” rather than “learned it.” Add one specific detail about learning with your siblings, and finish with a complete phrase such as “one of my favorite childhood memories.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it with my brothers and sisters, although it was quite difficult at first. Once I got the hang of it, I really enjoyed riding around with them. It’s one of my favorite childhood memories.

建議: Start with a clear yes or no, and avoid the contradictory “No” after saying bikes are popular. Use the natural phrase “rural areas” instead of “non city area,” and explain that bikes save money on fuel rather than saying they “save more energy.” Complete your final thought and connect your reasons with linking words such as “because” and “also.”

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas. Many people use them because they are an affordable way to get around and don’t require fuel. They are also convenient for short trips. However, in larger cities, people may prefer public transport because the roads can be busy.

× And that was one of my favorite childhood.

✓ And that was one of my favorite childhood memories.

The phrase one of my favorite must be followed by a plural countable noun. Use memories, not the singular childhood, to complete the phrase.

× Uh, for me, I think it's popular in our country, especially in non city area.

✓ I think they're popular in our country, especially in non-city areas.

The pronoun it's is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use they're to agree with bikes.

× Uh, for me, I think it's popular in our country, especially in non city area.

✓ I think they're popular in our country, especially in non-city areas.

When referring generally to more than one area, use the plural areas. The compound modifier non-city is hyphenated here.

× No, because it's save more energy.

✓ No, because it saves more energy.

In the present simple, a third-person singular subject such as it takes a verb ending in -s. Use saves, not save.

× We don't have to use a gas.

✓ We don't have to use gas.

Gas refers to fuel in general and is uncountable in this context, so it does not take the indefinite article a.

× So it less, uh, more of financial problem if you're going to use a bike.

✓ So it's less of a financial problem if you're going to use a bike.

The main clause is missing the verb is. Add it's (it is) to form a complete clause.

× So it less, uh, more of financial problem if you're going to use a bike.

✓ So it's less of a financial problem if you're going to use a bike.

The singular countable noun problem needs an article. In the phrase less of a financial problem, use a before problem.

× And yeah, it's really kind of.

✓ And yeah, they're really popular.

The sentence ends with kind of but does not complete the thought. Finish the phrase with a complement, or rephrase it as a complete sentence. They're really popular fits the question about bikes.