自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答切题，也加入了妈妈教你骑车的回忆，内容具体。不过第一句缺少标点，两个意思连在一起；“I still remember that was my mum”语法不自然，可以说“ I still remember that it was my mum”；骑自行车通常用“ride it”，而不是“use it”。另外，“running ahead”容易让人理解成你在跑步，建议改为“riding ahead”。

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle about fifteen years ago. I still remember that my mum taught me how to ride it, and I rode ahead while she chased after me.

建議: 回答了自行车是否受欢迎，但后面的例子表达不清楚。“I can often saw”应改为“I often see”；“ride their bicycles to walk trips”不符合英语表达，可以说“ride their bikes for short trips”或“to get around”；“show it in my moments”不清楚，若想表达发到朋友圈，可以说“share photos on WeChat Moments”。建议用一个清晰、具体的例子支撑观点。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see people riding them for short trips, especially in busy areas. Some people also share photos of their rides on WeChat Moments.

× Yes I did about fifteen years ago I had my first bicycle.

✓ Yes, I did. About fifteen years ago, I had my first bicycle.

原句把两个完整句子直接连在一起，造成句子粘连。应在“Yes, I did”后用句号分开，或使用适当的连词连接完整句子。

× I still remember that was my mum who taught me how to use it.

✓ I still remember that it was my mum who taught me how to use it.

“that”引导的从句中缺少主语“it”。这里使用强调句型“it was ... who ...”，因此应补上“it”。

× Yes in my country the bicycles are quite popular.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country.

此处泛指自行车这一类事物，应使用复数名词“bicycles”，前面通常不加定冠词“the”。“the bicycles”通常指语境中已经明确提到的那些自行车。

× I can often saw I can often see that some people ride their bicycles to walk trips and show it in my moments.

✓ I can often see that some people ride their bicycles to walk trips and show it in my moments.

情态动词“can”后应接动词原形，因此不能说“can saw”，应改为“can see”。原句中的“I can often saw”看起来是说话时的自我修正，回答时应删去这个错误的重复部分。