自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問には直接答えられていますが、「when I six years old」は文法的に誤りです。「when I was six years old」と言いましょう。また、「from my friends」だと複数の友人から自転車をもらったという意味になります。友人からの贈り物だったのか、家族から買ってもらったのかを正確に伝え、必要に応じて自転車に乗ったときの思い出を一つ加えると、より自然で具体的な回答になります。

範例: Yes, I had my own bike when I was six years old. My friends gave it to me as a birthday present, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

建議: 自転車が人気かどうかを尋ねられているので、「Yes, cycling is popular in my country.」のように、まず質問に直接答えましょう。「my country is popular to bike with」「gets the own bike」「my childhood is everyday is going to the bike using bike」は不自然で、意味が伝わりにくくなっています。「多くの家庭に自転車がある」「通勤や近所への移動に使われる」など、具体的な理由を一つ加え、同じ内容の繰り返しを避けましょう。

範例: Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country. Many households own at least one bike, and people use them for short trips and commuting. I also rode my bike almost every day when I was a child.

× Yes, I got my own bike from my friends when I six years old.

✓ Yes, I got my own bike from my friends when I was six years old.

The sentence describes a time in the past. The verb be is needed before six years old, and its past-tense form is was.

× Yes, my country is very popular to bike with.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

Use in to describe where bikes are popular. The original preposition to does not express this location correctly.

× Every house gets the own bike,

✓ Every household has its own bike,

Use the possessive determiner its to show that the bike belongs to each household. The is not correct before own in this construction.

× so my childhood is everyday is going to the bike using bike.

✓ so I rode a bike every day during my childhood.

The original clause has an incomplete and repeated structure, making the relationship between the words unclear. Use a subject and a main verb to form a complete clause.

× so my childhood is everyday is going to the bike using bike.

✓ so I rode a bike every day during my childhood.

The sentence refers to an activity during childhood, which is in the past. Use the past-tense verb rode rather than the present-tense form is going.