自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答问题，再补充一两个具体细节。注意发音或用词：这里应是“bike”，不是“bite”；“made me feel special”中“made”不需要重复。表达过去的经历时，使用自然的结构，如“my friends and I used to ride our bikes”。最后一句应说明你怀念这辆自行车的原因，避免句子不完整。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was orange, and I loved it because it made me feel special. My friends and I used to ride our bikes in the park, so I still feel nostalgic about it.

建議: 观点明确，但例子中的表达不够自然，且“park for parking”没有清楚说明你观察到什么。“the government put your bike in everywhere”也不符合语法和语义。可以具体说明你在哪里看到很多自行车，以及它们如何被使用；用“for example”或“because”连接理由，并避免重复结尾观点。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see people cycling in parks and around the city, especially during rush hour. Many cities also have public bike-sharing schemes, which make cycling convenient.

× I remember the bike was orange that made made me feel I was special.

✓ I remember that the bike was orange, which made me feel special.

原句中“that made made”结构重复，而且关系从句与前面的内容衔接不清。可用“which”引导补充说明，并删除重复的“made”。“I remember that...”也是更清晰、完整的表达。

× When me and my friends went to biking in the park and I really missed the bike.

✓ When my friends and I went biking in the park, I really missed the bike.

“me and my friends”在句中作主语，应使用主格“I”，而不是宾格“me”。通常也将“I”放在并列主语的后面，因此改为“my friends and I”。

× When me and my friends went to biking in the park and I really missed the bike.

✓ When my friends and I went biking in the park, I really missed the bike.

表示“去骑车”时，通常说“go biking”，不在“biking”前加“to”。可以记住“go + 动词-ing”表示去进行某项活动，例如“go swimming”。

× When me and my friends went to biking in the park and I really missed the bike.

✓ When my friends and I went biking in the park, I really missed the bike.

以“When”开头的部分是从句，不能用原句中的“and”这样连接后面的主句。应在从句后加逗号，再接完整主句。

× For example I usually went to park for parking and I saw there are always bikes nearby and the government put your bike in everywhere.

✓ For example, I usually go to the park for parking, and I see that there are always bikes nearby, and the government puts bikes everywhere.

“park”前通常需要定冠词“the”，所以应说“go to the park”。描述通常发生的情况时也应使用一般现在时，故此处将“went”改为“go”，将“saw”改为“see”。

× For example I usually went to park for parking and I saw there are always bikes nearby and the government put your bike in everywhere.

✓ For example, I usually go to the park for parking, and I see that there are always bikes nearby, and the government puts bikes everywhere.

这里是在描述目前通常存在的情况，不是过去发生的一次事件，因此应使用一般现在时：“usually go”和“see”，而不是“usually went”和“saw”。

× For example I usually went to park for parking and I saw there are always bikes nearby and the government put your bike in everywhere.

✓ For example, I usually go to the park for parking, and I see that there are always bikes nearby, and the government puts bikes everywhere.

“the government”是第三人称单数主语。使用一般现在时描述政府的行为时，谓语动词应加“-s”，所以“put”应改为“puts”。

× For example I usually went to park for parking and I saw there are always bikes nearby and the government put your bike in everywhere.

✓ For example, I usually go to the park for parking, and I see that there are always bikes nearby, and the government puts bikes everywhere.

“everywhere”本身表示“到处”，前面不需要加介词“in”。因此应说“puts bikes everywhere”，而不是“put your bike in everywhere”。