自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and clarify whether you mean a bicycle or a motorcycle, since “bike” can refer to either. Your answer contradicts itself: you say you did not have a bike, but then say your neighbour bought one for you. Also, “people had to be listened” is not natural English; explain the rule or its effect in a clearer way.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Children in my country weren’t allowed to ride motorcycles, so my family didn’t buy me one. I used to walk or take public transport instead.

建議: Use “my country,” not “your country,” and replace unclear phrases such as “cars low” with the specific point you mean, such as “cars are slow in traffic.” Avoid repeating “So that is why,” and check subject–verb agreement (for example, “motorcycles allow”). Organize your reasons into one clear sentence and add a specific detail if you can.

範例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country. Heavy traffic often makes cars slow and costly to use, so many commuters choose motorcycles instead. They are generally cheaper to run and can help people get to work more quickly.

× For that reason people had to be listened, so my family neighbour bought one for me.

✓ For that reason, people had to listen to the rules, so my family neighbour bought one for me.

Listen is normally used in the active voice with the preposition to. The passive phrase had to be listened is not grammatical here. Use had to listen to the rules to express that people needed to obey or pay attention to them.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in your country because heavy traffic congestion makes cars low and expensive to use.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because heavy traffic congestion makes cars low and expensive to use.

The student is answering a question about their own country, so my country is the appropriate reference. Your country refers to the examiner's country.

× So that is why many commuters prefer motorcycles since they are cheaper, more and motorcycle is more fuel efficient and allow to allow them to reach their destination faster than the car.

✓ That is why many commuters prefer motorcycles: they are cheaper and more fuel-efficient, and they allow commuters to reach their destinations faster than cars.

The original sentence combines several ideas with an incomplete comparison and a repeated, malformed verb phrase: more and allow to allow. Organize the reasons into parallel clauses, remove the repetition, and state clearly what the motorcycles allow commuters to do.

× So that is why many commuters prefer motorcycles since they are cheaper, more and motorcycle is more fuel efficient and allow to allow them to reach their destination faster than the car.

✓ That is why many commuters prefer motorcycles: they are cheaper and more fuel-efficient, and they allow commuters to reach their destinations faster than cars.

The verb must agree with its subject. In the original, motorcycle is singular, but allow is plural. Since the sentence is making a general statement about motorcycles, use the plural subject motorcycles with the plural verb allow.

× So that is why many commuters prefer motorcycles since they are cheaper, more and motorcycle is more fuel efficient and allow to allow them to reach their destination faster than the car.

✓ That is why many commuters prefer motorcycles: they are cheaper and more fuel-efficient, and they allow commuters to reach their destinations faster than cars.

The comparison is between motorcycles in general and cars in general. Use the plural cars rather than the car to compare these categories consistently.