自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答切题，也提供了骑车上学和路程时间的细节。注意叙述过去经历时要使用过去时：将“go”改为“went”，“need”改为“needed”。“At that time.”是残句，可以删掉或与后一句合并；“go to school with my bike”不够自然，可说“ride my bike to school”。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I rode my bike to school almost every day. It took me about ten minutes to get there from home.

建議: 你表达了“自行车很受欢迎”以及人们骑车通勤的意思，但“back”和“beck”应为“bike/bikes”；“lots of bags”可能想表达“很多共享单车”，应使用“shared bikes”。注意句子结构：可以先直接回答，再用“because”说明原因；“骑车上班”可说“commute by bike”，“用手机骑它们”应表达为“用手机解锁”。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people commute by bike, especially in busy cities. There are also plenty of shared bikes on the streets, which people can unlock with their phones.

× Of course, when I was a child, I always go to school with my bike.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I always went to school by bike.

这句话描述的是童年时期的习惯，时间背景是过去，因此一般现在时 go 应改为一般过去时 went。表达“骑自行车”通常说 by bike。

× At that time.

✓ At that time, it took me about 10 minutes to get from home to school by bike.

“At that time”只是时间状语短语，没有谓语动词，不能独立构成完整句子。应将它与后面的内容连接，并补充完整的主谓结构。

× From my home to school, I need about 10 minutes on my bike.

✓ It took me about 10 minutes to get from home to school by bike.

这里描述的是“小时候”从家到学校所需的时间，应使用过去时。表示某事花费某人一段时间，可以用“It took me ...”。

× Yes, back is very popular in my country that some people go to work with beck and there are lots of bags on the street that you can ride them by your phone.

✓ Yes, bikes are so popular in my country that some people go to work by bike, and there are lots of bikes on the street that you can rent using your phone.

“so ... that ...”表示“如此……以至于……”，所以应说“so popular ... that ...”，不能在“very popular”后直接接 that 表示结果。这里也将明显与自行车相关的词语统一为 bikes，以使句意清楚。

× There are lots of bags on the street that you can ride them by your phone.

✓ There are lots of bikes on the street that you can rent using your phone.

关系代词 that 已经在定语从句中代替前面的 bikes 作宾语，因此不能再重复使用 them。可说“bikes that you can rent”，意为“可以租用的自行车”。