自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答问题，并注意把“bike”说对，避免误说成“bag”。描述过去的经历时统一使用过去时，例如“my parents bought me”和“I was happy”。删去重复和犹豫表达（如“I am and I was”及“that's all”），再补充一个具体细节，例如自行车的颜色、用途或你常骑去的地方。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and although it wasn't expensive, I was really happy with it. I often rode it around my neighborhood.

建議: 回答方向明确，也举出了上班族和学生骑车的例子。注意“famous transportation”不自然，可改为“a popular form of transport”；描述普遍现象时用一般现在时，不要用“will”。把后半句整理成完整、平行的表达，例如“Adults ride bikes to work, while students cycle home after school”，并可补充一个原因，如方便、便宜或环保。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many adults ride them to work, while students often cycle home after school. They’re an affordable and convenient way to get around, especially for short distances.

× Yes, I have a bag when I was a child that's my parents bought me and it's not expensive and I am and I was happy when I have this bike and that's all.

✓ Yes, I had a bag when I was a child that my parents bought me. It wasn't expensive, and I was happy when I had this bike.

这里的“that's”是“that is”的缩写，不能直接用来引导“my parents bought me”这个修饰“bag”的定语从句。应使用关系代词“that”。

× I have a bag when I was a child ... when I have this bike.

✓ I had a bag when I was a child ... when I had this bike.

句子讲的是童年时发生的事情，时间背景是过去，因此表示“拥有”的动词应使用过去式“had”，而不是现在式“have”。

× Yes, I think it's a famous transportation in my country ...

✓ Yes, I think bikes are a famous form of transportation in my country ...

“transportation”通常是不可数名词，不能直接说“a transportation”。可以在它前面加可数名词“form”，构成“a form of transportation”。

× ... because I saw the people will use the bike to get to work or when the children or teenagers after school they will use the bike get home ...

✓ ... because I see people using bikes to get to work, and children and teenagers use bikes to get home after school ...

这里描述的是所在国家普遍存在的情况，应使用一般现在时。将“saw”改为“see”，并将表示习惯行为的“will use”改为“use”。

× ... they will use the bike get home ...

✓ ... they use bikes to get home ...

“use”后面不能直接接“get home”来表达“使用自行车回家”。应在表示目的的动词前加“to”，构成“use bikes to get home”。