自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了自行车的颜色、父亲教你骑车以及学会骑车所用的时间，内容比较具体。不过，回答中有明显的重复和自我修正（如“that my that's it's”），影响流畅度；注意使用过去时，例如把“I have a bike”改为“I had a bike”，并避免在同一句中重复“ride a bicycle”。最后一句“it had been sold now”表达不自然，可以改为“It has since been sold”。建议按“直接回答—描述自行车—补充回忆”的顺序组织。

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small black bike when I was a child, and my dad taught me how to ride it in our housing estate. I learned after about three days of practice. Unfortunately, the bike has since been sold.

建議: 回答提到了大学生骑车上课这一具体例子，但没有清楚地直接说明自行车在整个国家是否受欢迎；“It depends on the students”也没有明确表达你的观点。后半段重复较多，最后一句未完成，且有语法错误，例如“we usually tried riding”应改为“we usually ride”，“try ride”应改为“try to ride”。建议先明确回答“总体上很受欢迎”或“在某些群体中很受欢迎”，再用宿舍到教室距离较远这一原因展开，控制在两到三句。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among university students. Many of us cycle from our dormitories to class because the campus is quite large and the buildings are far apart. It’s a convenient and affordable way to get around.

× I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

句子描述的是“小时候”的情况，时间在过去，因此要用一般过去时。have 的过去式是 had。

× That's it's a black bike with a small size.

✓ It was a small black bike.

“with a small size”不符合英语的自然表达。要直接描述自行车的尺寸，可以用形容词 small 修饰 bike。此外，that's 和 it's 是口语中的重复或改口，不需要同时保留。

× And after three days I finally learned how to ride a bicycle and but it had been sold now.

✓ After three days, I finally learned how to ride a bicycle, but it was sold later.

句子讲述过去发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。had been sold 是过去完成时，通常需要另一个过去时间点作参照；与 now 连用不合适。此处可改为一般过去时被动语态 was sold。and 和 but 也重复表达转折或连接关系，应删去 and。

× It depends on the students such as such as us in university we usually ride bicycles and it's very popular.

✓ It depends on the students. Students like us at university usually ride bicycles, and bicycles are very popular.

原句把“It depends on the students”和“we usually ride bicycles”两个完整句子直接连接，结构不清楚。可拆成两句，并用 Students like us at university 作第二句的主语。such as 重复出现也应删去。

× Every day we ride from the dormitory to the classroom there is a long distance so we usually usually tried riding bicycle.

✓ Every day, we ride from the dormitory to the classroom. The distance is long, so we usually try riding bicycles.

原句把多个意思直接连在一起，句子结构不清楚；可拆句，并用 The distance is long 表达“距离很远”。此外，描述每天的习惯应使用一般现在时 try，而不是过去式 tried。泛指自行车时通常用复数 bicycles。

× We are we usually try ride bicycle.

✓ We usually try riding bicycles.

try 后面可以接动名词，表示“尝试做某事”，因此这里可说 try riding。ride 前不能直接省略 to 而接原形。此外，We are 是口语中的重复开头，应删去；泛指自行车时用复数 bicycles。