自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then describe the memory in a clear sequence. Correct the grammar in “my aunt has his mom taught me” and use a complete, specific phrase instead of “there was a down.” Avoid repeating “I remember”; use linking words such as “when” and “so” to connect the details.

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. When I was about ten, I borrowed my cousin’s bike, and my aunt taught me how to ride it. We practised outside a church near my home, where the road sloped gently downhill. I was nervous at first, but I soon enjoyed it.

建議: Give a clear opinion and explain it with one or two specific reasons. Use the plural “bikes” when discussing them generally, and correct “it is used” to “they are used.” Name delivery services clearly (for example, Foodpanda and Grab), and replace the unclear phrase “beneficial for them” with a specific benefit, such as lower delivery costs or reduced traffic.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, especially in busy cities. Delivery riders often use them for services like Foodpanda and Grab because they can move through traffic more easily than cars. They are also relatively affordable to run, and using more bikes may help reduce congestion.

× I borrowed my cousin's bike and my aunt has his mom taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ I borrowed my cousin's bike, and my aunt, his mom, taught me how to ride it.

The phrase has his mom taught me is not a grammatical clause. Use the past-tense verb taught to describe the event, and set off his mom with commas because it gives additional information about your aunt. Use it to avoid repeating bike.

× In my country, which is the Philippines, I think bikes are popular because it is used for other various deliveries, delivery services rather, like Food, Banda and Grab.

✓ In my country, the Philippines, I think bikes are popular because they are used for various deliveries and delivery services, such as Foodpanda and Grab.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to the plural noun bikes. Use they to agree in number with bikes. Various deliveries is also sufficient here; other is unnecessary in this context.

× It would be beneficial for them and also the there will be less traffic using the bike.

✓ It would be beneficial for them, and there would also be less traffic if people used bikes.

The extra the before there disrupts the sentence structure. Also, using the bike does not clearly connect to the idea that traffic will decrease. Use an if-clause to state the condition clearly. Would is consistent with the conditional idea expressed by would be beneficial.