自行车— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
Yes I did I'd like to talk about new skills learning child which was riding a bicycle and yeah my dad was giving me my dad was giving me a bike was around my seven years old at least ten and it remains one of the clicks mirals from my childhood.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Yes, in my opinion, I believe more cities will gain more green space in the future, public environment awareness in higher this day, such as people by Summerway or by red rail bicycle and many city governments green coverage girls for urban plane.
評估
總分
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分數: 35.0建議: 先直接回答问题，再按“谁给你的—大约几岁—这段经历对你的意义”组织内容。避免重复“I’d like to talk about”和“my dad was giving me”；可用过去时“gave me”，并注意“when I was about seven”和“one of my clearest memories”等表达。年龄信息需要保持一致。
範例: Yes, I did. My dad gave me my first bike when I was about seven, and he helped me learn to ride it. I was a little nervous at first, but I soon started riding around our neighborhood. It’s still one of my fondest childhood memories.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分數: 25.0建議: 回答重点应放在“自行车现在是否受欢迎”，而不是只谈未来的绿地。删去重复的“Yes, in my opinion, I believe”，并用清楚的原因和例子支持观点，例如通勤、锻炼、环保或城市自行车道。检查搭配和词形，如“environmental awareness is growing”和“cycle lanes”。
範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people use them for short trips because they are convenient and environmentally friendly. In addition, some cities have introduced public bike-sharing schemes and built more cycle lanes.
文法
× I'd like to talk about new skills learning child which was riding a bicycle.
✓ I'd like to talk about a new skill I learned as a child: riding a bicycle.
原句中的“new skills learning child”词序和句子结构不完整，读者难以判断各部分之间的关系。可以说“a new skill I learned as a child”，再用冒号引出具体技能。
× My dad was giving me my dad was giving me a bike was around my seven years old at least ten.
✓ My dad gave me a bike when I was around seven years old.
句子讲的是童年发生的事情，应使用一般过去时“gave”，而不是表示过去某一时刻正在进行的“was giving”。表达年龄时说“when I was around seven years old”，不用“my seven years old”。原句中重复的片段也应删去。
× Public environment awareness in higher this day.
✓ Public environmental awareness is higher these days.
原句缺少完整的谓语动词；“in higher”不能在这里构成正确的谓语。可使用“is higher”表达“更高”。另外，“environmental awareness”是“环境意识”的自然表达。
× Public environment awareness in higher this day.
✓ Public environmental awareness is higher these days.
这里表达“如今、近来”时，固定说法是“these days”，其中“these”要与复数名词“days”搭配，不能用单数形式“this day”。
× Many city governments green coverage girls for urban plane.
✓ Many city governments set green coverage goals for urban planning.
原句有主语“Many city governments”，但后面缺少谓语动词，因此句子不完整。按照上下文，可补上“set”（制定），构成完整句子“set green coverage goals”。
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