自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then explain the two stages of the story in chronological order. Use “in fifth grade” and “when I reached tenth grade,” and keep verb tenses consistent: for example, “my father bought” and “he would buy.” Avoid repeating “bike” and remove fillers such as “uh.”

範例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was in fifth grade. Later, my father promised to buy me a new one if I scored above 80% in my exams. I studied hard, reached that score, and he kept his promise.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two specific reasons. Use “one of the main modes” and “many people can afford them.” Avoid phrases such as “a poor or unrich” and “without a gap”; they are unnatural. Also clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes, since “bike” can refer to either.

範例: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in India. They are often more affordable than cars and are convenient in busy cities. Many families use them for commuting and running everyday errands.

× I had a bike when I was at 5th grade.

✓ I had a bike when I was in fifth grade.

Use in, not at, when referring to the school grade someone was in. You can say, I was in fifth grade.

× From there I started using bike.

✓ From there I started using a bike.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a bike when referring to one bike in general.

× When I reached a 10th...

✓ When I reached 10th grade...

Do not use a before an ordinal number in this expression. Say 10th grade.

× He offered me that when I score more than 80%, is he gonna buy me a bike?

✓ He promised me that if I scored more than 80%, he would buy me a bike.

The original mixes direct-question word order with a reported statement. In reported speech, use statement word order and a reporting verb that fits the meaning, such as promised. Use if to introduce the condition.

× When I score more than 80%...

✓ When I scored more than 80%...

The student is recounting a past event, so the past-tense form scored is needed.

× He buy me a bike.

✓ He bought me a bike.

This describes a completed event in the past, so use the irregular past-tense form bought, not buy.

× One of the main mode of transportation is bikes.

✓ Bikes are one of the main modes of transportation.

Use the plural modes after one of the main. The revised sentence also makes bikes the plural subject, so it uses are.

× Most of the people used to buy bikes.

✓ Most people buy bikes.

The answer describes what people generally do now, so use the present simple buy. Used to buy usually describes a past habit that has stopped.

× It's quite cheaper too.

✓ It's quite cheap too.

Quite modifies the adjective cheap; it does not require a comparative form. Use cheaper when directly comparing two things, for example, Bikes are cheaper than cars.

× Any people can afford it.

✓ Anyone can afford one.

Use anyone to mean any person. Any people is not the natural quantifier phrase in this affirmative statement.

× Even a poor or unrich...

✓ Even poor or less wealthy people...

Poor and less wealthy should describe the noun people. Avoid using a poor by itself here, and use the more natural adjective phrase less wealthy instead of unrich.

× People can afford buy it.

✓ People can afford to buy it.

Afford is followed by a to-infinitive, not a bare verb. Use afford to buy.

× Most people used to buy bikes...any people can afford it.

✓ Most people buy bikes...anyone can afford them.

The pronoun refers to bikes, which is plural, so use them rather than it.