自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Дайте пряму відповідь і додайте один конкретний спогад або деталь. Замініть неприродне “greenish streets” на “tree-lined streets” або “leafy streets”, приберіть повтор “experience” і розділіть довгу відповідь на коротші речення. Наприклад, можна згадати, де саме ви каталися або що вам подобалося в цих поїздках.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it along the tree-lined streets in my hometown, especially on weekends.

建議: Висловіть думку чітко, без зайвих підсилювачів на кшталт “obviously” і повтору “quite”. Виправте узгодження: “bikes are” або “a bike is”; природніше сказати “a great alternative for avoiding traffic”. Додайте конкретну деталь про те, хто або де користується велосипедами, і використайте зв’язку, наприклад “because” або “for example”.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in larger cities. Many people ride them to work in the morning because cycling can help them avoid traffic jams.

× Yeah, obviously I'm quite certain that bikes are quite popular in my country because during morning commute people try to avoid traffic jams and bikes is great alternative to do that

✓ Yeah, obviously, I'm quite certain that bikes are quite popular in my country because during the morning commute, people try to avoid traffic jams, and bikes are a great alternative to doing that.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are, not is. Match the verb to the subject in number: use are with plural subjects and is with singular subjects.

× Yeah, obviously I'm quite certain that bikes are quite popular in my country because during morning commute people try to avoid traffic jams and bikes is great alternative to do that

✓ Yeah, obviously, I'm quite certain that bikes are quite popular in my country because during the morning commute, people try to avoid traffic jams, and bikes are a great alternative to doing that.

The singular countable noun alternative needs an article. Use a before it because it refers to one alternative and is not a specific alternative already identified.

× Yeah, obviously I'm quite certain that bikes are quite popular in my country because during morning commute people try to avoid traffic jams and bikes is great alternative to do that

✓ Yeah, obviously, I'm quite certain that bikes are quite popular in my country because during the morning commute, people try to avoid traffic jams, and bikes are a great alternative to doing that.

In the expression alternative to, to is a preposition, so it should be followed by a noun or a gerund. Use doing rather than the base form do.