自行车— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
Yes, as a juvenile, when I was around fifteen, my father had purchased an automated bike for me which I used to cycle and bike around the town and sometimes if I had the chance I used to bike around the streets and get some coffee with my bike and enjoy.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Contrary to what many believes I assume bikes are getting more trend and common in my country, due to the high load of traffic and cars in the city in the weak days. I guess we will be seeing more and more bicycles in the streets and towns in the two or three years.
評估
總分
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分數: 55.0建議: Answer directly and use natural, concise phrasing. “Juvenile” is too formal here, and “automated bike” may be unclear; say “bicycle” or “electric bike,” depending on what you mean. Avoid repeating “bike” and “used to,” and split the ideas into clear sentences.
範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was about fifteen. My father bought it for me, and I used to ride it around town. Sometimes I would stop for a coffee while I was out.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分數: 48.0建議: Give your opinion clearly, then support it with a specific reason. Correct the grammar in “many believe,” use “becoming more popular” instead of “getting more trend,” and say “on weekdays” rather than “in the weak days.” Make the prediction concise and natural.
範例: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country. Traffic is often heavy on weekdays, so cycling can be a convenient way to get around. I expect to see more people riding bikes in the next few years.
文法
× When I was around fifteen, my father had purchased an automated bike for me.
✓ When I was around fifteen, my father purchased an automated bike for me.
The purchase is a completed event in the past. The past perfect had purchased usually describes an event that happened before another past event, but no later past event is given here. Use the simple past purchased.
× Contrary to what many believes, I assume bikes are getting more trend and common in my country.
✓ Contrary to what many believe, I assume bikes are getting trendier and more common in my country.
Many refers to multiple people, so it takes the plural verb believe, not the singular form believes. Also, trend is a noun; the adjective is trendy, whose comparative form is trendier.
× I guess we will be seeing more and more bicycles in the streets and towns in the two or three years.
✓ I guess we will be seeing more and more bicycles in the streets and towns over the next two or three years.
For a period extending from now into the future, use over the next two or three years. In does not express this future time period naturally.
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