自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then add one or two relevant details. Use “on my 11th birthday,” not “for my 11 year old birthday.” Correct “write it” to “ride it,” and remove the hesitation and repeated phrase “I it was self-taught.” You could say that you taught yourself to ride and describe when or where you rode.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it for my 11th birthday and taught myself to ride it. After school, I often rode around my neighborhood.

建議: Keep your answer focused on whether bikes are popular now, and use the past only if you are making a clear comparison. Replace “back in the days” with “in the past,” and avoid the unclear phrase “within my teenagers.” You could say “many teenagers used to cycle to school.” Add a brief detail about the present if you know one, and use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers. In the past, many young people cycled to school because fewer families had cars or motorbikes. These days, cycling is still a convenient way to get around, particularly for short journeys.

× I it was self-taught.

✓ I was self-taught.

The original sentence has two subjects, I and it, without a grammatical connection. Use I as the subject of was. Since the previous sentence already says you learned to ride by yourself, you could also omit this sentence to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I definitely think bikes are popular in my country, at least back in the days because there weren't a lot of umm cars or motorbikes available in my country.

✓ Yes, I definitely think bikes were popular in my country, at least back in the day, because there weren't a lot of cars or motorbikes available there.

The usual expression is back in the day, with singular day, not back in the days. The past-tense verb were also matches the reference to an earlier time.

× So especially within my teenagers they when they go to school they usually commute with bikes.

✓ Teenagers in particular usually commute to school by bike.

Within does not fit when referring to a group of people; among would be appropriate. Also, the standard expression for traveling using a bicycle is by bike, rather than with bikes. A concise sentence avoids the repeated and interrupted they construction.