自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答没有直接说明小时候是否有自行车，后面描述的似乎是儿童玩具车。建议先直接回答是否记得有自行车，再用一两句话补充你记得的玩具车；注意使用完整句子，例如“I don't remember clearly”以及“a small car that children could drive”。

範例: I don't remember clearly whether I had a bicycle as a child. I do remember having a small ride-on car, though, which I used to drive around for fun.

建議: 你表达了自己的观点，也尝试用观察作解释，但“driving for bike”和“mobile bike”不自然，而且“my cities”不清楚。建议直接回答后，用“ride bicycles”描述骑自行车，并明确你说的是摩托车还是电动自行车；可用“where I live”和“by contrast”让表达更清晰连贯。

範例: To be honest, I don't think bicycles are very popular where I live. I don't see many people riding them, whereas motorbikes are much more common because they are convenient for getting around.

× I don't remember so clearly I just remember having for like a car.

✓ I don't remember very clearly; I just remember having a car.

两个独立句子“I don't remember very clearly”和“I just remember...”直接连在一起，缺少标点或连接词，造成句子结构错误。可以用分号隔开。

× I just remember having for like a car.

✓ I just remember having a car.

“have”表示“拥有”时，后面直接接宾语，不需要介词“for”。应说“having a car”。

× It's a small car for a child to just drive it and getting around.

✓ It's a small car that a child can drive to get around.

原句中的“to drive”和“getting”形式不平行；此外，“for a child to drive it”里的“it”与前面的“a small car”重复。可以改为“a small car that a child can drive”，并用“to get around”表示开车出行的目的。

× In my cities I haven't seen so many people driving for bike.

✓ In my cities, I haven't seen many people riding bikes.

表示骑自行车时通常用“ride a bike”，而不是“drive for bike”。“for”在这里多余。

× But they were driving for a mobile bike more often.

✓ But I see people riding motorbikes more often.

这里是在描述目前观察到的普遍情况，应使用一般现在时，而不是过去进行时“were driving”。一般现在时适合表达当前习惯或常见现象。