自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly using the past tense: say “I didn’t have a bike.” Also, use “ride,” not “write,” and maintain consistent past tense by saying “I had a lot of fun.” You can make the answer more effective by adding one specific detail about where or how often you rode your uncle’s bike. Avoid unnecessary hesitation and use a clear topic sentence followed by a supporting detail.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike of my own when I was a child. However, I often rode my uncle’s bike around my neighborhood, and I had a lot of fun doing it. I usually rode it in the evening after finishing my homework.

建議: Although you give a direct answer, the supporting explanation is unclear and contains incomplete phrases. Say “There are many different bike brands available” instead of “there are a variety of brands in bike,” and introduce your example with a linking phrase such as “For example.” Be careful with vocabulary: if “Splendor” refers to a motorcycle brand, say “motorcycles” rather than “bikes.” Add a specific reason for their popularity, such as affordability or convenience, and reduce fillers such as “uh” and “umm.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially motorcycles. There are many affordable brands available, such as Splendor, so they are a common choice for daily transportation. People often use them because they are convenient and consume less fuel than cars.

× To be perfectly honest, I don't have one.

✓ To be perfectly honest, I didn't have one.

The question asks about a past situation, so the past tense did not have is required instead of the present tense do not have.

× When I was a child, I used to write my uncle's bike and I have a lot of fun.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride my uncle's bike, and I had a lot of fun.

The past-time expression when I was a child requires a past-time verb. Therefore, have should be changed to had. Also, ride is the appropriate verb for using a bicycle; write means to put words on paper.

× There are a variety of brands in bike.

✓ There are a variety of brands in bikes.

The noun bike should be plural because the sentence refers to bicycles in general, not to one specific bicycle.

× There are a variety of brands in bike.

✓ There are a variety of brands in bikes.

The preposition in must be followed by a suitable noun phrase. In bikes is grammatically appropriate when discussing brands available for or associated with bicycles. A more natural alternative is There are a variety of bike brands.

× That's including, umm, splendor.

✓ These include Splendor.

The phrase that's including is awkward in this sentence because the speaker is listing examples of brands. Use the complete structure these include followed by the examples. Splendor should also be capitalized because it is a brand name.