自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question more directly and remove the irrelevant phrase “as I told her.” Use “gave me” or “bought me” instead of “gifted me,” which sounds less natural in this context. Also, “by the end of the time” is incorrect, and “write confidently” should be “ride confidently.” Add a specific detail about where you practiced to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I did. My mother gave me a bike when I was about eight, and I was thrilled because I had wanted one for a long time. I practiced every afternoon near our house, so after a few weeks, I could ride confidently around the neighborhood.

建議: Give a direct answer without fillers such as “Umm” and “in one word.” Use “densely populated” rather than “very populated,” and say “bicycle lanes on most roads” instead of “on every road.” Avoid “like” as a filler and use the natural expression “ride bicycles” rather than “ride by cycle.” Connect your reason clearly with “because” or “as a result.”

範例: No, I wouldn’t say that bikes are very popular in Bangladesh. The country is densely populated, and many roads are narrow and congested, while dedicated bicycle lanes are uncommon. As a result, parents often worry about their children’s safety and do not encourage them to cycle.

× No, I didn't own a bike as I told her, but my mom gifted me one when I was about 8 years old and I was so thrilled.

✓ No, I didn't own a bike, as I told you, but my mom gave me one when I was about 8 years old, and I was so thrilled.

The student is speaking directly to the examiner, so the pronoun should be you rather than her. Also, a comma helps separate the introductory clause from the main statement. Gave me is more natural than gifted me in this everyday context, although gifted me is grammatically possible.

× I practiced every afternoon and by the end of the time I could write confidently around the neighborhood.

✓ I practiced every afternoon, and by the end of that time, I could write confidently around the neighborhood.

The phrase the time is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to a previously mentioned period. Use that time or the end of that period. Commas also make the sentence easier to understand.

× Since Bangladesh is a very populated country and our roads are very busy and narrow, we don't really have like bicycle lanes on every Rd. so parents don't feel safe to let their kids ride by cycle.

✓ Since Bangladesh is a very populated country and our roads are very busy and narrow, we don't really have bicycle lanes on every road, so parents don't feel safe letting their children ride bicycles.

After every, use the singular noun road, not the abbreviation Rd. The phrase every road is grammatically correct. In addition, bicycle lanes is already clear without the filler like, and ride bicycles is the natural grammatical expression for this meaning.

× Since Bangladesh is a very populated country and our roads are very busy and narrow, we don't really have like bicycle lanes on every Rd. so parents don't feel safe to let their kids ride by cycle.

✓ Since Bangladesh is a very populated country and our roads are very busy and narrow, we don't really have bicycle lanes on every road, so parents don't feel safe letting their children ride bicycles.

By cycle is not the natural expression after the verb ride. Say ride bicycles or ride a bicycle. The preposition by is used in expressions such as travel by bicycle, not normally after ride.