自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 時制と動詞の形に多くの誤りがあります。「have」は過去形の「had」、「gives」は「gave」にしましょう。また、「bikers」は人を指すため、ここでは「bikes」が適切です。「with my grand」は不自然なので、「with my grandfather」または「with my grandparents」と言い換えてください。最初に直接答え、その後に誰とどこで乗ったか、どのように感じたかを具体的に説明すると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a birthday present, and I often rode it with my grandfather in the park. I really enjoyed those rides because they were a fun way to spend time together.

建議: 質問に対して「Yes, bikes are popular in Japan」のように、まず明確に答えてください。「bike」は一般的な話なので複数形の「bikes」が自然です。「commit to commit to school」は誤りで、「commute to school」を使いましょう。また、「so it is common」はやや重複しているため、「This makes cycling a common part of daily life」とすると効果的です。通学以外にも、環境面や便利さなどの理由を一つ加えると、内容がより具体的になります。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many junior high school students commute to school by bicycle, especially in smaller towns. In addition, cycling is convenient and environmentally friendly, so it is a common form of transportation.

× In my childhood I have a bike and my parents gives me some bikers and I usually ride a bike with my grand It is fun time for me

✓ In my childhood, I had a bike, and my parents gave me some bikes. I usually rode a bike with my grandfather. It was a fun time for me.

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense. Change have to had, gives to gave, ride to rode, and is to was. Also, bikers means people who ride bikes; bikes is the correct noun here.

× In my opinion bike is popular in my country because many junior high school students commit to commit to school using bicycles so it is common in Japan

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because many junior high school students go to school by bicycle, so cycling is common in Japan.

When talking about bikes as a general category, use the plural form bikes. The plural subject bikes also requires the plural verb are.

× In my childhood I have a bike and my parents gives me some bikers and I usually ride a bike with my grand It is fun time for me

✓ In my childhood, I had a bike, and my parents gave me some bikes. I usually rode a bike with my grandfather. It was a fun time for me.

Use the article a before a singular countable noun when referring to one example. Therefore, say a fun time, not fun time. The phrase a bike is already correctly used.

× In my opinion bike is popular in my country because many junior high school students commit to commit to school using bicycles so it is common in Japan

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because many junior high school students go to school by bicycle, so cycling is common in Japan.

Because and so should not normally be used together to connect the same cause-and-result relationship. Use because to introduce the reason and so to introduce the result, as in this corrected sentence.

× In my opinion bike is popular in my country because many junior high school students commit to commit to school using bicycles so it is common in Japan

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country because many junior high school students go to school by bicycle, so cycling is common in Japan.

The natural expression is go to school, not commit to school. To describe the means of transportation, use by bicycle rather than using bicycles in this sentence.

× In my childhood I have a bike and my parents gives me some bikers and I usually ride a bike with my grand It is fun time for me

✓ In my childhood, I had a bike, and my parents gave me some bikes. I usually rode a bike with my grandfather. It was a fun time for me.

The original response is a run-on sentence, and my grand is incomplete. Divide the ideas into separate sentences and use the complete noun grandfather.