自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly in the first sentence and then give one or two clear supporting details. Correct the grammar and word choice: say “I wanted to have a bike,” not “I should wanted to have a bite”; use the past tense “played,” “didn’t buy,” and “didn’t have.” Also, “adulthood” and “at the moment right now” do not fit this childhood question. Avoid repeating “but” and keep the answer to two or three natural sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, although I sometimes wished I had one. I played with toy bikes, but I never owned a real bike because my parents thought it was unsafe.

建議: Respond to the examiner’s question without mentioning scores or the test. Give a clear opinion immediately, followed by specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating the question and phrases such as “Yeah, I do” and “I think I do.” Improve vocabulary and grammar by using “very popular,” “especially,” and “more and more often,” rather than “the most indeed truth” and “more oftenly.” The answer is unfinished, so include a complete explanation, such as the convenience of bikes or their use for commuting and exercise.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and office workers. Many people use them to commute because they are affordable and convenient, and cycling is also becoming more popular as a form of exercise. In large cities, more bike lanes are being built, so I think their popularity will continue to grow.

× Not at all, but sometimes I should wanted to have a bite.

✓ Not at all, but sometimes I wanted to have a bike.

The modal verb should is unnecessary here. If should is used, it must be followed by the base form, as in should want, not wanted. However, wanted is the correct verb for describing a past desire. Also, bike is the appropriate word in this context, not bite.

× But in my childhood although I play with the toys Thai bike but in my real adulthood I didn't bought anything like this at the moment right now.

✓ When I was a child, I played with toy bikes, but when I became an adult, I did not buy anything like that.

Because the speaker is describing childhood and adulthood in the past, play must be changed to played. After did not, the main verb must be in its base form, so bought must become buy. The time expression at the moment right now refers to the present and does not fit this past-time context.

× But in my childhood although I play with the toys Thai bike but in my real adulthood I didn't bought anything like this at the moment right now.

✓ When I was a child, I played with toy bikes, but when I became an adult, I did not buy anything like that.

Although and but should not be used together to connect the same contrast. Use either although ... or ... or ..., but ... . The revised sentence uses but to show the contrast clearly.

× But in my childhood although I play with the toys Thai bike but in my real adulthood I didn't bought anything like this at the moment right now.

✓ When I was a child, I played with toy bikes, but when I became an adult, I did not buy anything like that.

The original sentence contains too many conjunctions and unclear phrases, which makes its structure difficult to follow. Organize the ideas into two clear time clauses: one about childhood and one about adulthood.

× Yeah, I do, but at first please give me with my answers have a band score all along.

✓ Yes, I do. But first, please give my answers an overall band score.

The original sentence combines an answer to the examiner's question with a request, and the phrase give me with my answers have a band score is not grammatically structured. Use give my answers a band score, where answers is the indirect object and a band score is the direct object.

× Yeah, I do, but at first please give me with my answers have a band score all along.

✓ Yes, I do. But first, please give my answers an overall band score.

The preposition with is not used after give in this structure. Say give my answers a band score, not give me with my answers a band score.

× Yes, I I think I do not just think that, but it's probably the most indeed truth we cannot avoid right now and more oftenly it's more.

✓ Yes, I do. I do not just think that; I believe it is an undeniable fact that bikes are popular in my country.

The phrase the most indeed truth is not grammatically correct. Truth is normally an uncountable noun in this meaning, and the superlative article structure does not fit here. A natural expression is an undeniable fact. Also, the repeated subject I I should be reduced to one I.

× Yes, I I think I do not just think that, but it's probably the most indeed truth we cannot avoid right now and more oftenly it's more.

✓ Yes, I do. I do not just think that; I believe it is an undeniable fact that bikes are popular in my country and are becoming more common.

Indeed is an adverb and cannot directly modify the noun truth in the phrase the most indeed truth. More oftenly is not a standard form; the correct adverb is more often. The final phrase it is more is incomplete, so becoming more common expresses the intended comparison clearly.

× Yes, I I think I do not just think that, but it's probably the most indeed truth we cannot avoid right now and more oftenly it's more.

✓ Yes, I do. I do not just think that; I believe bikes are popular in my country, and they are becoming more common.

The original sentence contains repetition, an incomplete ending, and several ideas joined without a clear structure. Divide it into complete sentences and use a semicolon or a conjunction to connect closely related ideas.