自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then explain your experience in a clear sequence. Avoid fillers such as “you know,” and correct the tense: use “couldn’t” instead of “cannot” because you are talking about the past. The phrase “handle the balance well of riding a bike” is unnatural; say “keep my balance while riding.” Also, “I practiced them all” and “my partner” are unclear. Use linking words such as “at first,” “but,” and “after that,” and give one specific detail about who helped you or how you practiced.

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child, but I did try to learn how to ride one. At first, I couldn’t keep my balance, so my older brother held the back of the bike while I practiced. After a few weeks, I became more confident, although I never became a very skilled cyclist.

建議: Give a complete answer because the response ends abruptly with “ride bikes to.” Start with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, bikes are fairly popular in China,” and then distinguish between recreational cycling and commuting. Avoid repeating “in fact” and “well,” and use more natural expressions such as “bike-sharing services,” “cycle around parks,” and “use bikes to commute.” Add a specific reason or comparison to make the answer more developed and coherent.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China, especially in large cities. Many people use shared bikes to travel short distances, while others cycle around parks to enjoy the scenery and exercise. However, fewer people commute by bike on busy roads because traffic can be dangerous and public transportation is usually more convenient.

× I at the beginning usually, you know, I cannot handle the balance well of riding a bike.

✓ At first, I usually could not keep my balance while riding a bike.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the past form could not is needed instead of the present form cannot.

× I at the beginning usually, you know, I cannot handle the balance well of riding a bike.

✓ At first, I usually could not keep my balance while riding a bike.

The phrase balance well of riding is not grammatically correct. Use while riding to describe the activity during which you had difficulty keeping your balance.

× I at the beginning usually, you know, I cannot handle the balance well of riding a bike.

✓ At first, I usually could not keep my balance while riding a bike.

The original sentence contains two subjects, I and I, and the word order is confusing. Use one clear subject and place the introductory phrase at the beginning of the sentence.

× So I tried that with my partner as I practiced them all.

✓ So I practiced riding with my partner.

The pronouns that and them do not have clear or grammatically appropriate references. Use the specific activity, riding, instead of unclear pronouns.

× In China in fact, in many parks there are a lot of bikes that you can rent so that you can enjoy the beautiful scenery, well, you ride a bike on the way, but usually on the road, not many people ride bikes to

✓ In fact, in China, there are many bikes for rent in parks, so people can enjoy the beautiful scenery while riding. However, not many people usually ride bikes on the road.

The original response is a run-on sentence containing several ideas joined without appropriate sentence boundaries. Divide the ideas into complete sentences and remove the unfinished ending ride bikes to.