自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly using the past tense because the question asks about your childhood. Avoid the unnecessary repetition of “half of my day” and connect your reason naturally. You could say that you enjoyed riding your bike and explain how often you used it. Use “I had a bike” rather than “I do have a bike,” and avoid the incorrect structure “When I was a child and...”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I really enjoyed riding it, and I spent almost half of each day cycling around my neighborhood. It was one of my favorite activities because it gave me a sense of freedom.

建議: Your answer gives a clear opinion and contrast, but improve the grammar and word choice. Say “among children” instead of “among the children’s,” “adults and older people” instead of “the adult and elders,” and “travel by car” instead of “travel with car.” Make the explanation more natural by mentioning why children use bikes and why adults tend to drive. Use linking words such as “whereas” or “while” to connect the contrast.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. However, adults and older people usually prefer to travel by car because it is more comfortable and convenient. In larger cities, though, some adults also ride bicycles to exercise or avoid traffic.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about a past situation: when you were a child. Therefore, use the past-tense verb had instead of the present-tense form do have. You can also say Yes, I did have a bike for emphasis.

× When I was a child and I really loved riding it, that I almost spent half of my day, half of the day riding on it.

✓ When I was a child, I really loved riding it, and I spent almost half of my day riding it.

The conjunction that is used incorrectly here. Use and to connect the two ideas. Also, avoid repeating half of my day and half of the day. Practice connecting past events with clear conjunctions such as and, because, and so.

× When I was a child and I really loved riding it, that I almost spent half of my day, half of the day riding on it.

✓ When I was a child, I really loved riding it, and I spent almost half of my day riding it.

The original sentence has an incomplete and confusing structure because it combines a when-clause with incorrectly connected ideas. A clear structure is When I was a child, followed by the main ideas I really loved riding it and I spent almost half of my day riding it. Avoid unnecessary repetitions and make sure every clause is connected correctly.

× Yes, they are pretty popular in my country, but only among the children's, not among the elders because typically my country's adult and elders usually travel with car.

✓ Yes, they are pretty popular in my country, but only among children, not among adults and elders, because adults and elders in my country usually travel by car.

Children is already the plural form of child, so the possessive form children's is incorrect in this context. Adult must also be plural because it refers to adults in general. Use children, adults, and elders when speaking about groups. Pay attention to whether a noun refers to one person or more than one person.

× Yes, they are pretty popular in my country, but only among the children's, not among the elders because typically my country's adult and elders usually travel with car.

✓ Yes, they are pretty popular in my country, but only among children, not among adults and elders, because adults and elders in my country usually travel by car.

The standard expression for traveling in a car as a means of transportation is travel by car, not travel with car. Learn common transportation expressions such as by car, by bus, by train, and on foot.

× Yes, they are pretty popular in my country, but only among the children's, not among the elders because typically my country's adult and elders usually travel with car.

✓ Yes, they are pretty popular in my country, but only among children, not among adults and elders, because adults and elders in my country usually travel by car.

The phrase with car is missing an appropriate article if with is used: with a car. However, the more natural expression is by car, which does not require an article. Use by car when describing a general method of transportation.