自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly using accurate past-tense grammar. Avoid repeating words such as “for wheels,” and explain the final idea clearly; “I can make food” or “I can meet food” is not understandable in this context. Use linking words such as “because” and “also” to connect specific details, and keep the answer to two or three complete sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a beautiful pink bike when I was a child. It had sparkles on the wheels, which made it look very special. I loved riding it because I could explore my neighborhood and visit my friends.

建議: Give a clear present-day answer first, then make the comparison with your childhood. Correct the grammar in expressions such as “when I was a child, they weren’t very popular” and “bikes save time.” Avoid repeating the same idea about going everywhere, and add one specific reason or example to make your answer more effective.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially nowadays. When I was a child, fewer people rode them, but now many commuters use bikes because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic. They also provide a healthy way to travel short distances.

× Yes I had a bike when I was a child that's a beautiful pink and have sparkles for wheels.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was beautiful and pink, and it had sparkles on its wheels.

The answer describes a childhood experience, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Use was instead of is and had instead of have. Also, use it to refer to the bike clearly.

× It had sparkles for wheels.

✓ It had sparkles on its wheels.

Use on when describing something attached to or located on a surface. Therefore, on its wheels is the correct prepositional phrase.

× For wheels can make it easy to ride and I love to ride my bike because I can make I can meet food.

✓ The wheels made it easy to ride, and I loved riding my bike because I could use it to get food.

The original sentence contains repeated words and several incomplete or incorrectly connected clauses. Use a clear subject and verb in each clause, and connect the ideas with and.

× I love to ride my bike because I can get food.

✓ I loved riding my bike because I could use it to get food.

Because the answer refers to the past, can should change to could. Could expresses ability in the past.

× When I was a child, bikes are not that popular.

✓ When I was a child, bikes were not that popular.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past period. Therefore, use the past-tense verb were instead of the present-tense verb are.

× Yes, but when I was a child that's not that popular but now so many people like to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, but bikes were not that popular when I was a child. Now, many people like riding bikes.

The original sentence contains two contrasting ideas joined unclearly. Separate the ideas into two complete sentences and use bikes as the clear subject.

× Because that's lots of time to go anywhere don't get a lot of time to go anywhere.

✓ This is because it does not take much time to go anywhere.

For a general present-day reason, use the present-tense structure it does not take. The pronoun it refers to riding a bike or using a bike, and the original clause does not contain a complete subject-verb structure.

× It does not take a lot of time to go anywhere.

✓ It does not take much time to go anywhere.

In a negative sentence, much is generally used with the uncountable noun time. Much time is more natural and grammatically appropriate than a lot of time in this context.

× Easy to go everywhere.

✓ Bikes make it easy to go everywhere.

The original expression is a sentence fragment because it does not have a subject and a complete verb. Adding Bikes make creates a complete sentence.