自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then add one or two specific details. Correct the vocabulary and grammar errors: say “a birthday gift from my father,” “he taught me how to ride it,” and “it was very special to me.” Avoid repeating “when I was a child,” and use a natural linking word such as “Because of that” to connect the final idea.

範例: Yes, definitely. I had a small red bike when I was a child. It was a birthday gift from my father, and he taught me how to ride it. Because of that, it was very special to me.

建議: Give a complete and clear answer with a topic sentence and supporting reasons. Correct “it isn’t as famous” to “they aren’t as popular,” since “bikes” is plural, and avoid the repeated phrase “as as.” The phrase “In last decade to treat became dangerous” is unclear; explain specifically why cycling has become less popular, such as heavier traffic or unsafe roads. Finish the answer instead of stopping mid-sentence.

範例: Bikes are fairly popular in Turkey, especially among children and people who enjoy outdoor activities. However, they are less popular than they were a decade ago because traffic has become heavier and many roads are not safe for cyclists. As a result, people often prefer to use cars or public transport.

× It was a birthday gift for my father and he teached me how I should write it.

✓ It was a birthday gift for my father, and he taught me how I should write it.

The verb teach is irregular. Its simple past form is taught, not teached. Remember that irregular verbs do not form the past tense by simply adding -ed.

× It was a birthday gift for my father and he teached me how I should write it.

✓ It was a birthday gift from my father, and he taught me how I should write it.

Use from to show the person who gave the gift. For usually shows the intended receiver or purpose of a gift, while from identifies its giver.

× In Turkey, bikes are very popular, but it isn't as famous as as it was before.

✓ In Turkey, bikes are very popular, but they aren't as famous as they were before.

Bikes is a plural noun, so it must be replaced by the plural pronoun they. The verb must also agree with this pronoun: they are or they were, not it is or it was.

× In Turkey, bikes are very popular, but it isn't as famous as as it was before.

✓ In Turkey, bikes are very popular, but they aren't as famous as they were before.

The comparison structure is as adjective as, so as should appear only twice. The original sentence contains as as. Use one as before the adjective and one as before the comparison clause.

× In last decade to treat became dangerous and

✓ In the last decade, traffic became dangerous.

Use the definite article the before last decade when referring to a specific ten-year period. The phrase should be the last decade, not last decade.

× In last decade to treat became dangerous and

✓ In the last decade, traffic became dangerous.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains an unclear phrase. A complete sentence needs a clear subject and a verb, and it should not end with the conjunction and unless another clause follows. Use a structure such as subject plus verb: traffic became dangerous.