自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，也提供了年龄和父亲买车的具体细节，但表达不够自然，且有明显的自我纠正和重复。应直接说明“我十岁时父亲给我买了一辆自行车”，避免使用不自然的“study how to ride a bike”和“as a four grade student”。最后的“I can't. I couldn't.”应改为完整、准确的过去时句子，例如“I couldn't ride it at first.” 建议使用“but/however”连接转折，并将答案控制在2—3个流畅句子内。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was ten, my father bought me a bicycle because I needed it to get to primary school. I couldn’t ride it at first, but I learned after practising for a few weeks.

建議: 回答观点明确，也说明了自行车在学生群体中受欢迎的原因，但存在单复数、搭配和词性错误。“bike is popular”应改为“bikes are popular”，“from primary school students to high school students”应改为“among primary and high school students”，“work”应为“walk”，而“safety”应使用副词“safely”或形容词“safe”。可以用“because”引出原因，并补充一个具体结果，例如节省上学时间或减少交通费用。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among primary and high school students. Many of them cycle to school because bikes are cheaper and often faster than walking. They are also convenient for travelling short distances and help students stay active.

× Since I was 10 years old in my primary school as a four grade student, my father bought a bicycle for me.

✓ When I was 10 years old and in primary school, my father bought a bicycle for me.

这里表示“当我十岁时”，而不是“自从我十岁以来”，所以不能使用 since。表示过去某个时间点时，应使用 when。

× Since I was 10 years old in my primary school as a four grade student, my father bought a bicycle for me.

✓ When I was 10 years old and at primary school, my father bought a bicycle for me.

表示在学校就读时，通常使用 at school 或 at primary school，而不是 in my primary school。

× Since I was 10 years old in my primary school as a four grade student, my father bought a bicycle for me.

✓ When I was 10 years old and in primary school as a fourth-grade student, my father bought a bicycle for me.

four grade 不是正确的复合形容词。表示“第四年级的”应使用 fourth-grade，并且序数词 fourth 要放在 grade 前面。

× I can't. I couldn't.

✓ I couldn't ride a bike.

问题询问的是童年时期的经历，因此应使用过去时 couldn't。原句中的 I can't 是现在时，而且两个短句表达不完整，合并为 I couldn't ride a bike 更清楚。

× Yes, I think bike is popular in my country, especially for students from primary school students to high school students.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among students from primary school to high school.

这里是在泛指自行车这一类交通工具，所以 bike 应改为复数 bikes；主语是复数时，be 动词也要使用 are。

× Yes, I think bike is popular in my country, especially for students from primary school students to high school students.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among students from primary school to high school.

表示“在学生当中”时，应使用 among，而不是 for。并且 from primary school to high school 已经表达了范围，不需要重复 students。

× It's very useful for transportation for them to get to school because a bike is faster than just work and very safety for them.

✓ Bikes are very useful for transportation because they help students get to school faster than walking and are very safe for them.

比较速度时，bike 应与 walking（步行）比较，而不能与 work 比较。比较对象应保持逻辑一致，例如：A bike is faster than walking。

× It's very useful for transportation for them to get to school because a bike is faster than just work and very safety for them.

✓ Bikes are very useful for transportation because they help students get to school faster than walking and are very safe for them.

safety 是名词，不能用来描述自行车的状态。这里需要使用形容词 safe，表示“安全的”。