自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use more natural grammar. “The best bike” sounds slightly exaggerated; “a lovely bike” or “my favorite bike” would be more natural. Use the past tense consistently: say “It was pink and had...” rather than “It colored...” and “having...”. Also, say “on the handlebars” instead of “in the handle.” You could add one specific detail about why you liked the bike. Avoid unnecessary wording such as “by my bicycle”; simply say “by bike.”

範例: Yes, I had a lovely pink bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school every day, and it had colorful straps on the handlebars and a basket at the front. I really liked it because it was practical and looked attractive.

建議: Give a clear opinion and then support it with specific reasons. Avoid repeating “in our country” and “short trips,” and do not repeat “comfortable.” The phrase “comfortable travelling” is less natural here; say “a convenient way to travel” or “to get around.” Use a linking word such as “because” or “in addition” to organize your ideas, and include a concrete example of who uses bikes or where they ride them.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and affordable, especially for short trips. Many people also ride them for exercise, and some use them to commute to work. In larger cities, cycling has become more common because it helps people avoid traffic.

× So I used to go to my school every day by my bicycle and it was very attractive.

✓ So I used to go to school every day on my bicycle, and it was very attractive.

Use on, rather than by, with a bicycle because we say ride on a bicycle. The phrase go to school normally does not require my before school when referring to regular attendance.

× It colored in pink and having strapes in the handle and a basket in front of my bicycle.

✓ It was colored pink and had straps on the handlebars and a basket in front of it.

The bicycle receives the action of coloring, so the passive form was colored is needed. We do not use in before a color in this structure; colored pink is correct.

× It colored in pink and having strapes in the handle and a basket in front of my bicycle.

✓ It was colored pink and had straps on the handlebars and a basket in front of it.

The original sentence uses having without a complete finite verb and therefore does not form a correct sentence. Use had to coordinate it with was colored. Also, handlebars is the usual plural noun for the part of a bicycle where the straps were attached.

× People use bikes for comfortable comfortable travelling and it's more convenient for short trips.

✓ People use bikes for comfortable travel, and they are more convenient for short trips.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use they and are for a plural antecedent. The repeated word comfortable should also be removed, and comfortable travel is a more natural noun phrase.