自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense: say that you had a bicycle and explain how you used it. Correct the tense error “use” to “used,” and avoid fillers such as “like.” The phrase “buying stocks” is incorrect in this context; you probably mean “buying things” or “running errands.” Also, “my Loas” is unclear, so use “my parents” or “my relatives.”

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it with my cousins, and sometimes I used it to run small errands for my parents, such as buying groceries. It was a convenient and enjoyable way to get around.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Use the plural form “they are” when referring to bikes, and say “go to work or school” rather than “go to schools.” Replace the unclear phrase “it doesn't require you castle” with “they do not cost much” or “they do not require fuel.” Avoid repeating “because” by using a linking word such as “Moreover” or “As a result.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride them to work or school because they are inexpensive and do not require fuel. Moreover, bikes are easy to use and help people avoid traffic, especially in crowded cities.

× When I was a child I did have a bicycle and I use it for like playing with my cousins or with buying stocks that my Loas want me to buy.

✓ When I was a child, I did have a bicycle, and I used it for playing with my cousins or for buying stocks that my Loas wanted me to buy.

The answer describes activities that happened during the speaker's childhood, so the past tense is required. Use used instead of use and wanted instead of want.

× When I was a child I did have a bicycle and I use it for like playing with my cousins or with buying stocks that my Loas want me to buy.

✓ When I was a child, I did have a bicycle, and I used it for playing with my cousins or for buying stocks that my Loas wanted me to buy.

After the preposition for, a gerund ending in -ing is used. The natural structure is for playing and for buying. The word like is unnecessary in this structure.

× When I was a child I did have a bicycle and I use it for like playing with my cousins or with buying stocks that my Loas want me to buy.

✓ When I was a child, I did have a bicycle, and I used it for playing with my cousins or for buying stocks that my Loas wanted me to buy.

The preposition for should be repeated before the second activity to keep the structure parallel. Use for buying rather than with buying.

× Yeah, of course it is very popular in my country because a lot of people use it to go to work or to go to schools because it doesn't require you castle in it's free and easy to use.

✓ Yeah, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them to go to work or school. They do not require you to pay, so they are free and easy to use.

The subject is bikes, which is plural, so the sentence should use the plural form bikes rather than the singular pronoun it. The noun school is normally used without a plural ending when referring to the general activity of attending school.

× Yeah, of course it is very popular in my country because a lot of people use it to go to work or to go to schools because it doesn't require you castle in it's free and easy to use.

✓ Yeah, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them to go to work or school. They do not require you to pay, so they are free and easy to use.

Bikes is plural, so it must be replaced by they when it is the subject and by them when it is the object. The pronouns must agree in number with the noun they refer to.

× Yeah, of course it is very popular in my country because a lot of people use it to go to work or to go to schools because it doesn't require you castle in it's free and easy to use.

✓ Yeah, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them to go to work or school. They do not require you to pay, so they are free and easy to use.

Using because twice in the same long clause creates an unclear sentence structure. Use because to give the main reason and so to introduce the result.

× Yeah, of course it is very popular in my country because a lot of people use it to go to work or to go to schools because it doesn't require you castle in it's free and easy to use.

✓ Yeah, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them to go to work or school. They do not require you to pay, so they are free and easy to use.

When school refers to the general purpose or activity of attending school, it is usually used without an article and without a plural ending. Therefore, go to school is more appropriate than go to schools here.

× Yeah, of course it is very popular in my country because a lot of people use it to go to work or to go to schools because it doesn't require you castle in it's free and easy to use.

✓ Yeah, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them to go to work or school. They do not require you to pay, so they are free and easy to use.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined together without a clear structure, and require needs the infinitive form to pay after it. Dividing the response into two sentences makes the ideas clearer and grammatically complete.

× Yeah, of course it is very popular in my country because a lot of people use it to go to work or to go to schools because it doesn't require you castle in it's free and easy to use.

✓ Yeah, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them to go to work or school. They do not require you to pay, so they are free and easy to use.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are, and the plural subject they requires do not require. Singular forms such as is and does not agree with the plural subject.