自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense and avoid self-correction and repetition. The phrase “Yes, I will” is incorrect because the question asks about your childhood. Use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details about the bike, such as its color, when you used it, or where you rode it. Also, say “a petrol-powered bike” rather than “a bike which was run by petrol.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small, petrol-powered bike, and I usually rode it around my neighborhood after school. I really enjoyed riding it because it gave me a sense of freedom.

建議: State your opinion clearly and avoid repeating “in my country” and “more popular.” Use natural comparisons such as “more affordable than cars” instead of “cheaper as compared to other four-wheel vehicles.” Explain the main reason with a linking word such as “because” or “as a result,” and finish the incomplete sentence. You could also add a specific result, such as their usefulness in crowded cities or their lower fuel costs.

範例: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. This is mainly because they are much more affordable than cars and use less fuel. They are also easier to park, so many people choose them for their daily commute.

× Yes I will.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about a past experience, so the future form will is incorrect. Use the past auxiliary did to answer a past-tense question.

× I have.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase I have uses the present tense, but the question refers to the period when you were a child. Use had because the situation was in the past.

× I had a bike when I was a child and I I had a bike which was run by petrol, not electric.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. It ran on petrol rather than electricity.

The subject I is repeated accidentally, and the original sentence is unnecessarily repetitive. Dividing the information into two sentences makes the structure clearer.

× A bike which was run by petrol

✓ A bike that ran on petrol

The bike uses petrol to operate; petrol does not actively run the bike. Therefore, use the active form ran on petrol instead of the passive form was run by petrol.

× Bikes are more popular as compared to other four wheel 4 wheel vehicles.

✓ Bikes are more popular than other four-wheeled vehicles.

The standard comparative structure is more popular than. The phrase four wheel 4 wheel is also incorrectly repeated; use the compound adjective four-wheeled before vehicles.

× The most important thing for this is that because bike is cheaper as compared to other vehicles.

✓ The main reason is that bikes are cheaper than other vehicles.

The conjunctions that and because are used together unnecessarily in this sentence. Use one clear structure: The reason is that. Also, use the plural noun bikes when speaking about bikes in general.

× So in my country bikes are more popular because everyone.

✓ Therefore, bikes are popular in my country because everyone can afford them.

The clause after because is incomplete because everyone does not express a complete idea. Add a verb and complete the meaning with everyone can afford them.