自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ в целом отвечает на вопрос, но содержит много грамматических и смысловых ошибок. Используйте простую структуру: прямой ответ, затем 1–2 конкретные детали. Вместо «this presents both me, my father» нужно сказать, кто подарил велосипед, например «My father bought it for me». Фраза «But we are rich» не связана с предыдущей мыслью; если вы хотите объяснить причину, используйте «Although we weren’t rich, my father saved money to buy it». Обратите внимание на прошедшее время: «I was», «I rode» и «it made me happy».

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a blue bike when I was about eight, and I was really happy because having a bike had always been my dream. I used to ride it around my neighbourhood after school.

建議: Начните с чёткого ответа: «Yes, they are quite popular». Затем объясните почему и приведите конкретный пример. Исправьте ошибки «many peoples» на «many people», а «cycling in bikes» на «ride bicycles» или «cycle». Избегайте повторов «really, really» и незаконченных конструкций. Используйте связку «because» или «especially», чтобы логично соединить мнение и детали; завершать ответ фразой «That’s all» не обязательно.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and fitness enthusiasts. Many people ride them in parks or cycle to work because it is a cheap and healthy way to travel. However, cycling is less common in busy city centres because of heavy traffic.

× And this presents both me, my father and it was really nice and powerful.

✓ My father presented it to me, and it was really nice and powerful.

The question refers to the student's childhood, so the past tense is required. The present-tense verb 'presents' should be changed to the past-tense verb 'presented'.

× And this presents both me, my father and it was really nice and powerful.

✓ My father presented it to me, and it was really nice and powerful.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure: 'both me, my father' does not form a complete or logical phrase. Use the structure 'My father presented it to me' to clearly show who gave the bike and who received it.

× But we are rich.

✓ But we were rich.

The answer is describing the student's childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense. The past form of 'are' is 'were'.

× Because in my country many peoples bikes cycling in bikes on bikes and they are like they are really, really like this sport.

✓ Because in my country, many people like cycling, and they really like this sport.

'People' is already the plural form of 'person'. The word 'peoples' is used only when referring to different ethnic or national groups, so 'many people' is correct here.

× Because in my country many peoples bikes cycling in bikes on bikes and they are like they are really, really like this sport.

✓ Because in my country, many people ride bikes, and they really like this sport.

The sentence describes a general situation in the country, so the present tense is appropriate. Use the complete present-tense verb phrase 'people ride bikes' instead of the incomplete phrase 'people bikes cycling'.

× Because in my country many peoples bikes cycling in bikes on bikes and they are like they are really, really like this sport.

✓ Because in my country, many people ride bikes, and they really like this sport.

The prepositions 'in bikes' and 'on bikes' are used incorrectly in this sentence. The natural expression is 'ride bikes' without a preposition.

× Because in my country many peoples bikes cycling in bikes on bikes and they are like they are really, really like this sport.

✓ Because in my country, many people ride bikes, and they really like this sport.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and repeated phrases, such as 'peoples bikes cycling' and 'they are like they are really'. Use a clear subject-verb structure: 'many people ride bikes' and 'they really like this sport'.