自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答の主旨は明確ですが、文法と自然な表現を改善する必要があります。「green colors」は「green」または「green in color」、「when I go」は過去の話なので「when I went」にしましょう。また、「used that」は自転車を指すため「used it」が自然です。買い物や友達に会うために使ったという具体的な内容はよいので、「For example」などのつなぎ言葉を使い、最後の「and so on」はできるだけ具体的な例に置き換えてください。

範例: Yes, I did. I had a green bike, and I often used it to go shopping or meet my friends. For example, I rode it to a nearby shopping street after school.

建議: 「Yes, I think so」の後に文を区切り、「People use them to travel to nearby places」のように主語と目的語を明確にしてください。「go go」や「in fact in fact」の繰り返しは避け、「bikes」は複数形なので「them」を使います。最後の「Japan has a lot of narrative」はこの文脈では意味が不明確です。おそらく「Japan has many narrow roads」などを言いたかった可能性があるため、国の特徴を正確な語彙で説明し、理由や具体例を1つ加えると、より効果的な回答になります。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many people use them to travel to nearby places because cycling is convenient and inexpensive. In addition, some Japanese towns have narrow roads, so bikes can be easier to use than cars.

× I had a bike that was green colors.

✓ I had a green bike.

Green is an adjective and should directly modify the noun bike. Colors is an unnecessary plural noun in this structure. You can also say, I had a bike that was green in color.

× I always used that when I go shopping and meet my friends and so on.

✓ I always used it when I went shopping and met my friends.

Use it to refer to the bike because the bike is a previously mentioned object. That is possible in some contexts, but it sounds less natural here. Also, because the question refers to your childhood, the past-tense forms went and met are needed.

× I always used that when I go shopping and meet my friends and so on.

✓ I always used it when I went shopping and met my friends.

The events happened during your childhood, so go and meet should be changed to their past-tense forms went and met. Keep the verbs in the same past-time frame.

× People use it when they want to go go the place nearby.

✓ People use them when they want to go to nearby places.

Bikes is plural in meaning, so use the plural pronoun them instead of it. The repeated word go should appear only once. The sentence also needs the preposition to before the destination.

× People use it when they want to go go the place nearby.

✓ People use them when they want to go to nearby places.

The verb go normally takes to before a destination, as in go to a place. The phrase nearby places is a natural way to express general destinations close to the speaker.

× Yes, I think so people use it when they want to go go the place nearby and in fact in fact Japan has a lot of narrative.

✓ Yes, I think so. People use them when they want to go to nearby places. In fact, Japan has a lot of narrative.

Several independent ideas are joined without appropriate sentence boundaries. Separate them into complete sentences and place the introductory phrase In fact at the beginning of a new sentence. The repeated words go and in fact should also appear only once.