自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本切题，也提供了拥有自行车的原因和后来不再骑车的情况，但有明显的时态、搭配和表达问题。应将“Sure I have”改为过去时“Sure, I did”，因为问题询问的是童年经历；“after I grown up”应改为“after I grew up”，“rarely ride bike”应改为“rarely rode my bike”。“I usually take bath”与骑自行车的语境不相关，可能是想表达“进行其他运动”，应删除或替换。建议使用清晰的主题句，再用“because”和“however”连接原因与转折，并减少“umm”等停顿词。

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was a child, mainly so I could get some exercise. However, after I grew up, I rarely rode it because I became busier with school and work.

建議: 回答直接表明了观点，并给出了骑车的用途和共享单车的例子，内容较充分。需要改进语法和搭配：“ride bicycle”应为“ride bicycles”或“ride a bicycle”，“when go to work or school”应为“when they go to work or school”，“shared bicycle”应为“shared bicycles”，“around our country in our street”表达重复且不自然，可改为“on streets across the country”。建议用“both…and…”连接两种用途，并具体说明共享单车为什么方便，例如可以短途出行、减少交通拥堵。

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride them both for exercise and for commuting to work or school. In addition, shared bicycles are available on streets across the country, which makes short-distance travel more convenient and helps reduce traffic congestion.

× Sure I have.

✓ Sure, I did.

问题回答的是童年时是否有自行车，应该使用一般过去时。回答过去时态的一般疑问句时，应使用助动词“did”，而不是“have”。

× I do have a little bicycle.

✓ I did have a little bicycle.

这里描述的是小时候拥有的自行车，因此应使用一般过去时“did have”，而不是现在时“do have”。

× But after I grown up I umm rarely ride bike again because I have less time doing such kind of outdoor exercise.

✓ But after I grew up, I rarely rode a bike again because I had less time to do that kind of outdoor exercise.

“grow”的一般过去时是“grew”，不能使用“grown”；“rarely ride”和“have”也应与过去的叙述保持一致，分别改为“rarely rode”和“had”。

× But after I grown up I umm rarely ride bike again because I have less time doing such kind of outdoor exercise.

✓ But after I grew up, I rarely rode a bike again because I had less time to do that kind of outdoor exercise.

“bike”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词，因此应说“a bike”。描述特定的一类活动时，“that kind of outdoor exercise”比“such kind of”更自然。

× So I usually umm take bath.

✓ So I usually took a bath.

固定搭配是“take a bath”，可数名词“bath”前需要冠词“a”。由于上下文描述过去的情况，动词也应使用过去式“took”。

× UMM people usually ride bicycle for exercise as well as umm when go to work or school.

✓ People usually ride bicycles for exercise, as well as when they go to work or school.

“bicycle”在这里表示自行车这一类交通工具，应使用复数“bicycles”。泛指一类事物时，通常使用复数形式。

× UMM people usually ride bicycle for exercise as well as umm when go to work or school.

✓ People usually ride bicycles for exercise, as well as when they go to work or school.

“when go to work or school”缺少主语，应该补充“they”。完整的从句需要包含主语和谓语，即“when they go”。

× There are a lot of shared bicycle around our country in our street which is very convenient for residents.

✓ There are a lot of shared bicycles around our country in our streets, which are very convenient for residents.

“a lot of”后面应接可数名词复数，因此“bicycle”要改为“bicycles”。“our streets”也应使用复数，以表示多个街道。

× There are a lot of shared bicycle around our country in our street which is very convenient for residents.

✓ There are a lot of shared bicycles throughout our country and on our streets, which are very convenient for residents.

“around our country in our street”的介词组合不自然。表示“遍布全国”可以使用“throughout our country”，表示“在街道上”应使用“on our streets”。

× There are a lot of shared bicycle around our country in our street which is very convenient for residents.

✓ There are a lot of shared bicycles throughout our country and on our streets, which are very convenient for residents.

“which”指代复数名词“shared bicycles”，所以后面的系动词应使用复数形式“are”，不能使用单数形式“is”。