自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接并且包含了经历、原因和感受，内容较完整。不过，建议使用更自然的表达：将“go to school with a bike”改为“go to school by bike”或“ride my bike to school”；“keep me fit and healthy”可以改为更自然的“keep me fit”；最后一个分句前应使用连接词，避免一个句子中连续使用多个“and”。另外，既然谈论的是童年，可以使用过去时来保持时态一致。

範例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike to school when I was a child. It was a convenient way to get around, and it also helped me stay fit. I was especially fond of my little blue bike.

建議: 回答观点明确，也给出了可持续发展的原因，但表达略显生硬且重复。建议将“on the grounds of the sustainable development”改为“because of growing environmental awareness”或“as people become more concerned about sustainable development”；“a environmental friendly”应改为“an environmentally friendly”；“more and more people”重复两次，可以用“this trend”替代。建议使用“Moreover”或“Therefore”等连接词，并补充一个具体例子，例如共享单车或城市自行车道，使内容更具体、更有说服力。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. As people become more concerned about environmental protection, many of them are choosing an environmentally friendly lifestyle. For example, bike-sharing services are widely available in major cities, so cycling is now a convenient way to commute.

× Yes, I did. I used to go to school with a bike when I was a child and I think it is also a good way to keep me fit and healthy and I really like my little bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to go to school by bike when I was a child, and I think it is also a good way to keep me fit and healthy. I really like my little bike.

表示“骑自行车”时，交通方式通常使用介词“by”，所以应说“go to school by bike”，而不是“go to school with a bike”。“with a bike”更容易表示“和一辆自行车一起”，不符合这里表达交通方式的意思。

× Yes, I think so because on the grounds of the sustainable development, more and more people attach importance to a environmental friendly lifestyle so more and more people like riding bikes nowadays.

✓ Yes, I think so because, in the context of sustainable development, more and more people attach importance to an environmentally friendly lifestyle. Therefore, more and more people like riding bikes nowadays.

“on the grounds of”通常表示“以……为理由”，在这里表达“在可持续发展的背景下”不够恰当。可以使用介词短语“in the context of”，表示“在……的背景下”。建议根据具体含义选择合适的介词短语，例如“because of”（因为）、“due to”（由于）或“in the context of”（在……背景下）。

× Yes, I think so because on the grounds of the sustainable development, more and more people attach importance to a environmental friendly lifestyle so more and more people like riding bikes nowadays.

✓ Yes, I think so because, in the context of sustainable development, more and more people attach importance to an environmentally friendly lifestyle. Therefore, more and more people like riding bikes nowadays.

“environmentally”以元音音素开头，所以前面的不定冠词应使用“an”，不能使用“a”。正确形式是“an environmentally friendly lifestyle”。同时，“sustainable development”在这里表示一般概念，通常不需要使用定冠词“the”。

× Yes, I think so because on the grounds of the sustainable development, more and more people attach importance to a environmental friendly lifestyle so more and more people like riding bikes nowadays.

✓ Yes, I think so because, in the context of sustainable development, more and more people attach importance to an environmentally friendly lifestyle. Therefore, more and more people like riding bikes nowadays.

“friendly”是形容词，前面需要用副词修饰，因此应使用“environmentally friendly”，意思是“对环境友好的”，而不是“environment friendly”。建议注意复合形容词中的词性：名词“environment”需要先变成副词“environmentally”，再修饰形容词“friendly”。