自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời chưa trả lời rõ câu hỏi vì bạn dùng “bag” thay vì “bike” và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng. Hãy mở đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp ở thì quá khứ: “Yes, I did.” Sau đó, kể thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể như bạn nhận chiếc xe đạp khi bao nhiêu tuổi, ai mua và màu sắc của nó. Cần dùng đúng thì quá khứ: “was”, “bought”, “liked”; đồng thời dùng “ride a bike” thay cho “recycle”.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was five years old, and my father bought me a pink one. I loved riding it around my neighborhood after school.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm và đưa ra hai lý do hợp lý: xe đạp thuận tiện và tốt cho sức khỏe. Tuy nhiên, cần tránh cách diễn đạt tuyệt đối “all people” và sửa các lỗi ngữ pháp như “bikes are”, “riding a bike is”, “it helps people” và “go to school”. Hãy sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng gồm ý chính, lý do và kết quả; đồng thời hạn chế các từ ngập ngừng như “uh” và tránh lặp lại “go to”. Bạn có thể bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể, chẳng hạn học sinh dùng xe đạp để đi học hoặc người dân dùng xe đạp để tránh tắc đường.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and factory workers. Many people ride them because they are convenient and inexpensive. In addition, cycling is good for their health and can help reduce traffic congestion.

× Yes, I have a bag when I were a child of a eyes.

✓ Yes, I had a bag when I was a child.

The question asks about a past experience, so have must change to had. Were is incorrect with the singular subject I; was is required. The phrase a eyes is not grammatically correct and has been omitted.

× Remember when I was five years old, I beginning a recycle with my father's.

✓ I remember that when I was five years old, I began recycling with my father.

Because the experience happened in the past, beginning must be changed to the past-tense form began. The phrase with my father's is incorrect because father's shows possession; the correct form is with my father.

× Remember when I was five years old, I beginning a recycle with my father's.

✓ I remember that when I was five years old, I began recycling with my father.

After begin, an -ing form is used when referring to an activity. Therefore, began recycling is correct, not beginning a recycle.

× He buys for me a pink bag.

✓ He bought a pink bag for me.

The action happened in the past, so buys must be changed to the past-tense form bought.

× I really like it.

✓ I really liked it.

The student is describing a childhood experience, so the past-tense form liked is more consistent with the context.

× Yes, I think it's so very popular.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular.

The topic is bikes, which is plural. The singular pronoun it does not correctly refer to bikes, so the noun bikes should be used with the plural verb are.

× All people ride a bike to go to the school or go to, uh, the factories, uh, because ride a bike is very convenient in my country.

✓ People ride bikes to go to school or to factories because riding a bike is very convenient in my country.

When speaking about bikes in general, the plural form bikes is more appropriate than the singular form a bike after the plural subject People.

× All people ride a bike to go to the school or go to, uh, the factories, uh, because ride a bike is very convenient in my country.

✓ People ride bikes to go to school or to factories because riding a bike is very convenient in my country.

School is used without the in the general expression go to school. The definite article the is used only when referring to a specific school or specific factories.

× All people ride a bike to go to the school or go to, uh, the factories, uh, because ride a bike is very convenient in my country.

✓ People ride bikes to go to school or to factories because riding a bike is very convenient in my country.

The phrase because ride a bike lacks a grammatical subject form. When an activity is the subject of a clause, use the gerund form riding a bike.

× It's help people many things and uh, good for the health.

✓ It helps people in many ways and is good for their health.

The subject It is third-person singular, so help must be changed to helps. The phrase helps people many things is incomplete; helps people in many ways is the natural structure.

× It's help people many things and uh, good for the health.

✓ It helps people in many ways and is good for their health.

The second part, good for the health, does not contain a verb. The verb is must be included before good: is good for their health.

× It's help people many things and uh, good for the health.

✓ It helps people in many ways and is good for their health.

When referring to health in a general sense, the phrase good for health or good for their health is more appropriate than good for the health.