自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use more natural expressions. “Yes, I did” is sufficient; “I indeed did have a bike” sounds unnatural. Explain that you learned to ride because you enjoyed cycling, and clarify the final sentence by saying that the bike had small wheels or was a small bike. Avoid repetition such as “a memory I have” and “small little.” Use linking words such as “because” and “although” to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride it when I was about six because I really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood. I still have that bike, so it’s a special childhood memory, although it has very small wheels now.

建議: State your opinion more clearly at the beginning and support it with a specific reason or example. “The electric scooters” should be “electric scooters,” and “bikes are just neutral” is unclear; explain that bicycles are environmentally friendly because they do not require fuel or electricity. Avoid the hesitation “umm” and use a clearer contrast, such as “whereas” or “in contrast.” You could also mention why scooters are more popular, such as their convenience for short urban journeys.

範例: No, I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular in my country. Electric scooters are more common because they are convenient and require less physical effort, especially for short trips in cities. However, bicycles are more environmentally friendly because they do not use fuel or electricity.

× I actually learned because I really love biking.

✓ I actually learned to ride because I really loved biking.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the past tense is more appropriate: loved instead of love. The phrase learned to ride is also needed to clearly express what the student learned.

× Until now I have that bike as a memory I have.

✓ I still have that bike as a memory.

The original sentence repeats the idea of having the bike and has an awkward structure. Use still to express that the bike remains in the student's possession.

× It's a small little wheel.

✓ It has small wheels.

A bike has wheels, so the plural noun wheels is appropriate. The verb has is also needed to show that the bike possesses the wheels. Avoid using a bike is a wheel unless you intend to say that the object itself is a wheel.

× But I feel like it's causing problems because bikes are just neutral while umm, electric scooters need energy.

✓ But I feel like they are causing problems because bikes are more environmentally friendly, while electric scooters need energy.

The pronoun it does not clearly refer to electric scooters, which is a plural noun. Use they to refer to electric scooters. The phrase more environmentally friendly expresses the intended comparison more clearly than neutral.