自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is direct and well developed, with specific details about the bicycle, your grandfather, and your feelings. However, avoid repeating “I love,” and use the past tense consistently because you are talking about your childhood. You could also improve the sentence structure by saying “He often played with me while I rode it” and linking the ideas more naturally.

範例: Yes, I had a blue bicycle that my grandfather gave me. He often played with me while I rode it around the neighborhood. I loved cycling because it made me feel free and happy, and it was a special way for us to spend time together.

建議: You answer the question and provide relevant supporting details, but the response contains several hesitations and repetitions, such as “in my opinion, I think,” “which is,” and “umm.” Use “popular sport” instead of “famous port,” “there are” instead of “there’s are,” and “which are” because you are referring to two brands. The brand names should be written as “Giant” and “Merida.” Start with a clear topic sentence and then explain your answer using a linking word such as “Moreover.”

範例: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in my country. We have two well-known bicycle brands, Giant and Merida, and there are many cycling routes around the island. Moreover, cycling is a convenient way to exercise and enjoy the scenery.

× Yes, I had a blue bicycle that my grandfather gave me. He often played with me while I was riding it and I love I love cycling around the neighborhood because it made me feel free and happy.

✓ Yes, I had a blue bicycle that my grandfather gave me. He often played with me while I was riding it, and I loved cycling around the neighborhood because it made me feel free and happy.

The answer describes a past childhood experience, so the verb love should be in the past tense: loved. The repeated phrase I love I love should also be reduced to one verb phrase. Keep the verb tense consistent when describing past experiences.

× Uh, in my opinion, I think, right, cycling is a famous port in my country because, umm, there's are two famous brands in my country, which is, uh, which is giant and married out.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, I think, right, cycling is a famous port in my country because, umm, there are two famous brands in my country, which are, uh, which are Giant and Merida.

The noun phrase two famous brands is plural, so the correct there-be structure is there are, not there's are. Use there is with singular nouns and there are with plural nouns.

× Uh, in my opinion, I think, right, cycling is a famous port in my country because, umm, there's are two famous brands in my country, which is, uh, which is giant and married out.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, I think, right, cycling is a famous port in my country because, umm, there are two famous brands in my country, which are, uh, which are Giant and Merida.

The relative pronoun which refers to two famous brands, which is plural. Therefore, the verb must be are rather than is. Make sure the verb agrees with the noun that the relative pronoun refers to.