自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly in the past tense, then add one or two specific details. Use “when I was a child,” not “when I have a child,” and maintain consistent past tense: “rode” instead of “take” and “looked” instead of “looking.” Avoid repetition such as “I take my taken my bicycle,” and clarify the meaning of “flage,” which seems to be a typing or word-choice error. Use a linking word such as “Usually” or “Also” to connect your supporting details.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it with my brother around our neighborhood after school. We often explored different streets together, so those bike rides are still a great childhood memory for me.

建議: Give a complete answer and avoid ending with “or.” Use the plural noun “bikes” when discussing bicycles in general, and use “there are many children who ride bicycles” instead of “there is so many children ride a bicycles.” Correct the phrase “when they are have a free time” to “when they have free time,” and use “their father” and “their brothers” to agree with “children.” Add a specific reason or example to make the answer more effective.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Many children ride them with their parents or siblings in parks and quiet neighborhoods when they have free time. They are popular because cycling is enjoyable, affordable, and a good way to exercise.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I have a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question refers to a period in the past, so the past tense is required. Use was, not have, in the expression when I was a child.

× When I was a child and I take my taken my bicycle with my brother and looking around my flage.

✓ When I was a child, I took my bicycle with my brother and looked around my village.

The answer describes a past experience, so the verbs should be in the simple past: took and looked. Do not use the incorrect combination take my taken. Also, use the simple past consistently when describing completed past activities.

× I take my taken my bicycle.

✓ I took my bicycle.

Taken is a past participle and normally needs an auxiliary verb, such as have or had. In this sentence, the simple past form took is the correct form.

× When I was a child and I take my taken my bicycle with my brother and looking around my flage and it was the great memory that I have.

✓ When I was a child, I took my bicycle with my brother and looked around my village. It was a great memory for me.

The original answer contains several clauses joined without a clear sentence structure. Use a complete subject and verb in each clause, separate complete ideas with a period, and avoid connecting unrelated verb forms with and.

× It was the great memory that I have.

✓ It was a great memory for me.

Use a before a singular countable noun when mentioning it for the first time. The phrase a great memory is appropriate here; the definite article the is not needed.

× I think bike is popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country.

The statement refers to bikes in general, so use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject also requires the plural verb are.

× There is so many children ride a bicycles.

✓ There are so many children who ride bicycles.

The noun children is plural, so use there are, not there is. The relative pronoun who is needed to connect children with the verb ride.

× There is so many children ride a bicycles.

✓ There are so many children who ride bicycles.

Children and bicycles are plural nouns. Do not use the singular article a before the plural noun bicycles, and use the plural form are with children.

× When they are have a free time with her father or with their brother.

✓ When they have free time with their father or their brother.

The verb have already expresses the present-time meaning, so are is unnecessary. Also, free time is an uncountable noun and does not normally take the article a.

× When they are have a free time with her father or with their brother.

✓ When they have free time with their father or their brother.

The pronoun should agree with the plural subject they. Therefore, use their instead of her.

× Yes, I think bike is popular in my country because there is so many children ride a bicycles when they are have a free time with her father or with their brother or.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because there are so many children who ride bicycles in their free time with their father or brother.

The original sentence has several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use who to introduce the relative clause, remove the unnecessary are before have, and finish the sentence without the extra or.